I can imagine
Laying down on the grass a blazing green
The stars looking down in jealousy
Your melting glare meets the surface of mine
Our love sets fire to the skyline tonight
relax, you knew it was going to come to this
down on one knee, ring sparkling in bliss
sweating,heart dancing, eyes blink, in an exotic glow
she accepts the gift, I'm losing control
Chastity Why'd you pick me.
I can see
A bachelors party entrapped in a bar
never wore a tuxedo in a bar before
the population raise their glass to the sky
say "heres to you a really great guy"
But I wonder
And that night we be in a lustfully lit room
Brittle, we enter the tomb
Theres something in the air a betrayal to remember
they say a lovers first night lasts forever
chastity why'd you pick me
and I can see a blood soaked blade in my hand
and you dying, buried on the floor
screaming unbearably, forever without control
but you will forever be ignored
and I can see myself miles away in a secret affair
and in a shallow grave, you will never be aware
They say that a lovers first night lasts forever
but after that it doesn't amount to much.
chastity you picked me
So I will continue to climb
alone
Author notes
Definition of Chastity
1: the quality or state of being chaste: B. abstention from all sexual intercourse C: purity in conduct and intention D: restraint and simplicity in design or expression
This poem is still in progress so expect revisions
A contest entry
- Do you have emotions? by Forgotten Anomaly.
550 points, ended October 27, 182 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Quite a remarkable write for someone only 16. However, not grasping the connection from the first three stanzas and the rest. The chasity part I get. Perhaps a hint of more?
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This is AWESOME!!! i love the whole tell-a-story in a poetic version! just shows you're great! And your words were brilliant, your wonderful metaphors painted many pictres in mind! >.< You ended with with a sad tone tho, and it made this excellent!!!
keep penning, luv ya! >.<
~Ranji
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Wow.....
This is an amazing write, especially for someone so young! I'm about your age too, so not to put anyhting out there, but I would never be able to (and have yet to) write something as deep as this. Congrats on a fine write!
Mylee -
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Hey thanks for commenting, I'm a beggining poet so such high praise is extroardinary and undeserved. I really appreciate it.
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