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Black and White Confessions

 

 


                       Black                    &                   White

the silent tears, that              you'll                  hold me again,

b l e e d his betrayal              never                  forget the past

across the empty page           understand         that you broke me

are brand new troubles          how                    now we'll be sober

she fears to approach             it                        because love matters
he's left us here alone            feels                   so baby, just love me.


The missing fragments, like shards of glass

have indented my with clear cuts

that only you can  b a n d a g e  u p.

Why wont you    

try to                                                         remember

learnt to                                                    accept

sincerely say                                              sorry

and                                                             love me forever -




Can you stop treating me as if I marked your life

with rainstorms, when you swore only weeks ago I made it

the sunniest, like you could never even  i m a g i n e


Honey, I need you & I wouldn't lie to you

[you.kept.me.from.hating.the.world.]
now I'm stuck on revenge on every m a n

who dares to claim they c a r e -

[...ButBabyYouCouldMakeItAlright...]

just loosen up your pride.


Love always

                       y o u r   b a b y - x -

Author notes

black and white photographs mainly, but some others work too... sorry it's scatty, it's supposed to be

x


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  • Kathraina silver member
    March 16

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    Wow marvelous job with this piece!
    Alot of emotion in every line, and great imagery and construction.


  • Walking Oxymoron gold member
    October 23, 2008

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    [you.kept.me.from.hating.the.world.]
    Love that, and also the Yellow part at the top, the first stanza got a little confusing, I think...
    I tried reading it in so many diffeent ways, and although some bits made sense,. otehrs didn't.

    Why wont you

    try to remember

    learnt to accept

    sincerely say sorry

    and love me forever -

    Loved that bit best, I think...
    Great write, something I envy you for!


  • perfectsunset gold member
    August 10, 2008

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    Aww this was really good dirty-pretty, although a bit confusing with the word spacing, I understood the point you were getting across. Beautifully done!

    Best of luck & thanks for entering


  • EvenStarsBreak--x
    July 20, 2008

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    So beautifully written! =] Great poem, it's absolutely stunning. Nice job, congrats on your trophies. Thank you for the entry.


  • edit my world.
    July 11, 2008
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    ahh finally...
    exactly what i was looking for! a lovely form of dirty pretty. it didnt leave a rotten taste in my mouth like most.

    you showed ur heart in this and i thank you.

    i have to admit that its very scattery...but after i read it a couple of times i got the hang of it. it flowed beautifully.
    thanks for entering and good luck

    ♥Toxic


  • glamour guts
    July 7, 2008

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    this is a really good piece,dirty pretty that speaks
    to the reader with more than just over exaggerated
    punctuation.well donee.
    i loveee it.


  • innocence jaded.xx
    July 6, 2008
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    WOW.

    I absolutely LOVED this. Honestly, if I could give you more than three applauds, I would, because this is just so incredibly INCREDIBLE. haha, sorry, but I LOVED this. Especially the first grouping of the "Black & White". Wow, very creative and unique. Absolutely mind-boggling how you did that. I also loved the meaning of this piece;; very beautiful & absolutely stunning. Thank you so much for the excellent entry & best of luck to you ! ♥

  • innocence jaded.xx
    July 6, 2008

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    Ahhh I really want to read this but could you please put the option number in your Author's notes ? Thankkks

  • Page Deleted.
    June 15, 2008

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    because love matters
    so baby, just love me

    I love this, especially the two lines above.
    The colours and words and everything is just beautiful.

    Thankyou for entering.

    Keira
    -- Liloven


  • chedli
    June 12, 2008

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    omg!

    it´s beautiful!!!


  • And Hyetal
    June 12, 2008
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    cassie loves.

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