Savage kisses blow against the wind,
Impelled to meet by the force of gravity.
Suction, the meeting of two strange faces,
Forced together by a violent puff,
Caught and tossed, just wild enough.
Grit gets caught between our lips,
An irrestible force, and rips.
Author notes
Didn't feel like being romantic
A contest entry
- AMAZE ME!!!!! by Sue Cardwell.
1000 points, ended June 18, 2008, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
So, what's your opinion of this?
Comments
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The body saying yes... but your mind said no ,, huh
that was a great poem ... that is what I got from it..
Your friend in Poetry... jackreed3...
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You achieved your aim...
...it is not romantic, but it is forceful and vivid. I like your choice of words to create that feeling. I think the free verse form also adds to it better than rhyme would.
'Suction' is a graphic word.
Yes, it does sound more like rape than a good night kiss. Ha!
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Hmmmmmmmmm, Well, it's not very romantic at all seems to me.
Seems more like rape, best of luck to you...Scott
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Thank you for this rather unusual poem in my contest, it was a joy to read.
All the best...Sue
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