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The Dark Angel of Poetry

The thunder of the hooves that draw my coach
are muffled by the silent screams within.
I feel a raging heart beneath my broach
in knowledge that the terror shall begin.
Mediocrity announces my approach,
as I cross the murky moat of verbal sin.
The souls that I defend are not alive
but by my sword their spirits shall survive.

The tempest in my heart shall strike the blow,
absconding brackish tears that flow so free.
The sweetness of revenge was born below
within the womb of dark uncertainty.
The ancient soils they trod upon are hallow,
the crypt they trod upon is poetry.
I shan’t allow their desecrating sound
to scar the dead that rest beneath this ground.

 

 

 

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Ottava Rima

Poetry is subjective but so many “poet wannabes” try to express their likes or dislikes in technical terms that they know nothing about.

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  • Pisces Pieces
    June 16, 2008

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    Well I for one know little about technicalities when it comes to poetry But, I appreciate that you have told it like it is! This an amazing metaphoric tale from my perspective, the imagery is fantastic, I can see every scene and feel the emotions as one stands up for what they believe in!

    I always enjoy your writing, even when I don't know what to say! It's always amazing...

    ♥


  • Pure Thought silver member
    June 12, 2008

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    Oh darn, now I feel more inferior than ever. Well executed as always. I never tire of reading your forms.


  • Desire gold member
    June 12, 2008

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    Oy!!

    Ooooooooooooooooh You do these forms so darn well and heck You do all forms so darn well I lost track of how many You've done~ like I said ions ago~
    Geeesh it helps if I could type
    I don't believe there is one form nor style You could not do~
    Actually I don't think there is one You have not tried
    Magnificent!!
    So keep that quill dancing and continue to Inspire the masses~ You sure Inspire me Beautiful

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~



  • Dalaney gold member
    June 12, 2008

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    If you hadn't put in the author notes, I doubt the host would have had a clue...
    I, personally, think you are brilliant, and more than just "well versed" in vocabulary. Keep the pen moving, darling, there is no stopping you Love, Lane


  • Poetry-and-rhyme
    June 12, 2008

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    oh siss this is soo adorable i liked the title a lottt and your rhymes and words just add the spices for my first class poetry creating sis
    i love you sis loadsss


  • cricketjeff gold member
    June 12, 2008

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    Not much doubt about the meaning here!
    Keep up the campaign


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    June 12, 2008

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    Wonderfully done.
    Indeed Alaln said it all so I shall leave it as that and wish you well in the contest.
    *lowers the veil and vanishes*

    Love always
    Passions


    • Amera gold member
      June 12, 2008
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      Raise that veil and kiss me before you leave.


  • RedAquarius
    June 12, 2008

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    I love the feeling of power in this, I see a strong figure standing in long cloak and raised sword declaring this in strident tones. Should it be brooch though, for the jewelry? I just really like your dark stuff!


    • Amera gold member
      June 12, 2008
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      Thank you! I was refering to how my broach would bounce on my chest when my heart beats.


  • macandrew
    June 12, 2008

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    A very beautiful bit of writing. As a poet and a medievalist your poem really hits home for me. Besides I love a good Ottava Rima.

    John


  • NeonRose
    June 12, 2008

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    Love this write! The feel and flow are perfect, as is everything you write, but the message! WOW! Love it!


  • Rovingone gold member
    June 12, 2008

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    You made it so clear with this poem. You can see the coach and the thundering horses, even the broach and the lace gown, all clothed in the shadows of some forbidding moment. The feeling of anxious, dire expectation, something deep and troubling comes through the lines. This is powerful stuff.


  • PerVirtuous
    June 12, 2008

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    This is just a neuclear explosion of meaning. Wow. I so love it when you get up on your hind legs and kick! You are on fire with this. I love your dark poetry, even more so when your heart is in it. Great stuff. Let's see more! Tell them what is what! THe bunnies will sing backup! (We'll paint them black)

  • Papagallo
    June 12, 2008

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    This is really dark and mysterious. I really did enjoy reading it several times. A great write!

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