Where the mist coagulates
against the lichen dressed ridges,
folded acordian gulches
filled with the harmony of splashing
waterfalls on outcrops,
split and sprayed into liquid cascading hair
shimmering in the sunbeams
cut by the jagged tips of the summit,
where white tailed aviators
float on moistened updrafts,
dewdrops on feathers, defying gravity
and soaring between Heaven and Earth,
coax the water to condense
then fall from the sky
(an earthly manifestation)
to coat with momentary nourishment
the temporary living,
before being buried beneath the ground:
only with the warming solar waves
to rise again!
Author notes
The grand symbolism in the world behind the World...
A contest entry
- Loose yourself into Largeness by Thoughts-of-Soloman.
1750 points, ended July 11, 2008, 16 entries
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I read:
Rise Again
Life an ever renewing.
Water is indeed Life both in symbolism and reality.
'(an earthly manifestation)' - I'm not sure why you put this here, nor do I think it has added anything. Was it because of an in-confidence?
I have read your work before and this instantly reconnects me to it. This is because you have a way of putting out such a richness of literally delicious taste in your poetry, that I have seldom received better in such way. The water here is alive and you can feel its qualities of life giving refreshment and nature of movement and not just read an explanation of it.
You bring it along with smell and texture of some of Nature's phenomena which depends on it. The dependants are temporary but Life itself is ever living.
This contest is going to be so hard to judge, with writes of this quality. Again, bypassing my brain you have hit my taste-buds!
Thank you so much for this.
Sol
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Brother Solomon
maybe that's why I put it in parenthesis...perhaps it doesn't add anything, but at the time, I guess (it was a while ago), I thought it did. I think I was trying to cement the notion of spiritual things manefesting themselves on earth in different forms...or something like that! Thank you for your marvelous comment on this poem, and I really hope I win! Ha ha! Aloha, brother.
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Thank you for giving a wonderful entry into the contest.
All the best with the judging.
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I don't get it...
What's this about?
Ahh' the 'world behind the world'.
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The supreme metaphor: the cycle of life, spirit, soul, birth, death: all symbolically wrapped up in the various constitutions of H2O, an earthly surface appearance, then a sort of death below ground, followed by a vaporous rise to the heavens, etc.
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Ahh'... That'll be 'you' then.
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