Dearest Mother,
If you are reading this now,
then you have also read the pain in my lifeless eyes.
You have found my corpse,
soaked in my disdainful blood.
My guess is you are screaming for father.
Maybe dialing 911.
But little do you know,
death is a match with time.
By the time I reach the hospital,
death has won the race.
You will wonder if you are to blame.
I will leave you with that question,
left unanswered, driving you to madness.
You will attend my funeral.
I imagine in a fancy black dress.
The attention on you as always.
But all of these things are only guesses.
For I am but a corpse now,
and I have no more thoughts.
I will rot here in the ground,
while life above me marches on.
Yet one thing I do not doubt.
I am dead and you have yet to shed a single tear.
Don’t worry mother I do not mind.
You haven’t shown me compassion all my life,
why start it at my demise?
One thing I think you must know mother,
is that I still love you now.
Even whilst I sleep forever in my plot.
Love is all I sought.
Bet you never even imagined,
you’d one day read my suicide note.
If maybe you’d have known,
then you’d have showered me with love.
Well mother I guess I should end this note.
But mother,
please know,
dying was the one thing I won’t regret.
-Me
Author notes
silent-fear
option 2
A contest entry
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704 points, ended June 12, 2008, 13 entries
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Comments
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Very nice poem. The words you used were very strong and gave a good effect, nice work =]
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Oh... wow. So powerful... made me want to go hug my mother myself. I loved how you expressed everything there. Great work!
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Excellent.
Truly Excellent.
Wonderful job.
It flows nicely.
And there was some good imagery.
Keep writing please [=
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this made me want to cry....having a good relationship with your parents is so hard to do....and so many people are in the position of not having one....it's so sad....
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very beautiful write <3 very well written
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can associate with this parent child relationship, and was quite a good poem
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Yet one thing I do not doubt.
I am dead and you have yet to shed a single tear and dying was the one thing I won’t regret. are my fav lines this is a great poem and i hopeyou keep up the great righting thankz 4 entering my contest
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very beautiful write, very very beautiful, good luck!
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oh wow... This is so powerful and beautiful... Wonderful job with this... So sad it really tugs at my heart... Great job keep up the good work and good luck in the contest.
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Your poem is precisely the reason I don't understand why people can't just love. Pain is not always physical, and sometimes, the deepest cuts we have leave no scars upon our physical forms. Anyway, well done, and good luck to you.
Laura x -
personaly ive always wanted to slit my wrists and hang myself above my mother's sleeping body...that way when she woke up covered in blood...she'd finaly see how mutch pain i was in...or it would at least scare the crapp out of her...but lets be realistic...she'd wake up before i was done with my noose
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I really enjoyed reading this piece. Sometimes I wonder if that's what it would be like if I were to kill myself. Thank you so much for the entry and good luck!
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Good write!
This was very well written... Expressing really strong emotions so well. The flow was good.
Thanks for entering.
Good luck
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this was stunning, precisely telling a remarkable story of need and unanswered love. its amazing a horrible sometimes that no matter what our parents have done or not done, we love them anyway. i love the almost matter of fact tone while it tells such a heartbreaking story. this is beautiful, thank you.
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I love this piece. I wish I can applaud you twice for it!
Though it is very dark, and pretty intense... I love it still. I loved the ideas, the somewhat angst thoughts and the very meaning of the poem. Much luck in the contest.
Blessed be
-Blanche
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such deep pain
Expressed in this is so much pain that it really draws you in it's so deep that you fell like an invader and you think l you should stop reading but you can't great work
Good luck on the contest
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Very morbid perspective, this gives me the chills. It reminds me of a person I knew that recently passed away like this. Sometimes these things inspire one to wonder whether or not such actions would be regretful. It is a mysterious thing to wonder what happens after death.
Good write all in all
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Wow, this is really intense!
You have such a wonderful way of translating your feelings into these words.
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Oh, so sad! I enjoyed reading it, nonetheless. Good luck in your contest(s).
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This is a great poem.
I feel the same way towrds my mother.
Obviously you dont get along to well with yours either.
Great poem.
Thanks for entering my contest and good luck
♥ Christina -
I loved it
My mother and I have absolutely no relationship at all anymore
I regret so much kicking her out of my life and not having her want back in
I have thought like this sooooooo many times
tahnks for entering
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This was a very emotional write, and is beautifully done! There were a number of lines that left me shocked, which is difficult to do, so my applause on that! Thanks for the entry
Amanda -
wow
beautiful poem i loved it!!
great poem!
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Holy cow, this is good, kinda scared me, but thats okay.
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This is so, how i feel right now. I can't even think of any words to describe it.
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wow
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