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clergy

 

see no evil, speak no evil

 

 

 Have you lost your mind?
Have you lost the call that you thought
God placed on your life?

You preach a good word
but that's all you do - talk it
Building trust with the ones you'll destroy
Like the innocence of young little boys

Turning pages of divinity
with fingers of implied apostasy
You can't see passed the scales on your eyes
And it sickens me
That you believe you have a right

All he wanted was a new life and forgiveness
Now he's scarred for life and lost his innocence
Men of God are putting their shackles back on
Staying in bondage to kiddie porn and acting like
there position pardons them

I hope no one ever opens their cell door
For if they do, God won't have a chance to bring His wrath
That's what prisoners are for

 

Author notes

Pic credit: http://resolutesorrow.deviantart.com/art/Clergy-11118628

This is probably the most controversial piece I've written. But since this is an ever-growing problem, I thought I'd address it.

Option - 7. I am not the biggest fan of religion. I accept it but I feel as if its not really needed. One of those things. But I'd like to see a poem about the corruption of religion or the pointlessness of it. (Don't think I hate you or dislike you for believing in religion by the way. Its just my views on it. I realize how some people use it for comfort and good)

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Comments

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  • your angers a gift
    February 22

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    Wow! That was a great write on the subject! Very well put. And it flowed very nicely also! Thanks for entering. Good luck!

  • luvdrkchocolate
    December 29, 2008

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    Oh. This is quite some poem that you have penned in here. If it weren't for all the news coverage on this subject I could scarcily believe this kind of thing could go on. I can see why you too would feel the need to raise awareness and speak out. I thought you did a good job of expressing yourself here.


  • Crowheart
    December 28, 2008
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    Yes well done!


  • Travel Notes
    September 12, 2008

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    the picture fits perfectly and definately sends chills down the spine which eriely echo through the entire piece. definately controversial, but very well delivered. you hit the topic hard and didn't sugar coat it. good for you. most would be too afraid.


  • zochit2me gold member
    June 28, 2008

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    The poem fits well with the picture and is in fact controversial as you state in your AN notes...
    None the less it is a growing problem in soceity and not just in the catholic religion but world wide.

    This poem kicks in the stomach of the reader and makes them think and to me that is good poetry.

    Great job

    ☼Becky☼


  • Heath Thompson
    June 27, 2008

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    Hello again!

    Here is a short critique as per your request...

    The words go really well with the picture which adds a sinister edge from the off - the poem also works without it.

    The first verse is the strongest and really is good. It could be about something as simple as questioning faith or something darker.

    I think the poem would work better if it was aimed at a specific priest/vicar rather than at them generally. Even though it may appear that this is a growing problem it is difficult to know that for certain or whether it is just publicised more in the media.

    It sickens you that they believe they have "a right" - do they believe they have a right to molest young boys? Does their position of trust give them the possiblity to act in this way? Why do they feel they have this right?

    The 4th verse brings in another person a "he" - as you are aiming this at clergy in general would it not be better being "they" (as in the children rather than a specific child)?

    A passionate write though. Keep it going


  • angelcalled666
    June 13, 2008

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    I love this.

    I cant get over how much
    this was like.
    a kick in the stomach.


    seriously.


    amazing

  • Fitz1901
    June 12, 2008

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    Hey some facts Bucko, only 2% of catholic priests are on the sex offenders list, and you can find that 2% in any denomination or religion in the world.

    but as for that 2% I completely agree with you, I love this poem because it is so brutally honest, it isn't sugar coded, its cyanide Coded. and because of that brutal honsesty its powerful.

    Thanks for entering

    • angelcalled666
      June 13, 2008
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      I loved this.
      and I think if you read it with more of an open mind.
      it more directed toward the offenders.
      not everyone.



      =/


  • CountryCousin
    June 12, 2008

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    Well it is good.

    You know they do not know the wrath that they indeed face because God do not like ugly. And you truly wrote what you felt. So that said I think you did a fine job.


  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    June 12, 2008

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    Superb

    Aye, 'tis that. And not limited to just one religion.
    Unfortunatly these pedophiles* give all men (homosexual and heterosexual) a bad name, especially if a man is single. Stereotyping an individual, degrades the one doing the stereotyping. An excellent write, indeed.

    *http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Child_abuse


  • movedon
    June 12, 2008

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    Wow........I...wow.

    I agree about the controversy. This is such a strong write though. The picture adds oodles of emotion to it. oodles..what a fun new word!...anyways, this is a fine write indeed my friend. Very well done.

    Mylee

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