You must read me with a male voice,
a booming male voice…
and I with a female voice- light,
soft and smooth…
and I, am a man, hairy and smelly, with a deep-throated voice…
and I, am a woman, hairy and smelly, yet sweet and demur…
But I, thou contentious woman, am the hairier and smellier…
I concur, you filthy beast…
A badge of honor, ma’am…
Please tell me what you think
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lol... oooook... This one is strange but funny!!! You did a great job on this!!! I really enjoyed reading it!!! Keep up the great work!!!
Hugs,
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Oops... I just read it reversed
but somehow in my married world it works. Well not the hairy part but the smelly. Oops.. too much info.
You never cease to amaze me
and as Martha used to say "it's a good thing"
laurie
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great humour. its funny how i read each line with the voice described. really makes me wonder if my mind has a gender or whether it takes that which is given to it at any given time. thank you.
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Hahaha
Yeah, was totally reading it in a male and female voice. You humore is great!
Btw. Your ... should actually be like this . . .
With the spaces . . .
Just a technicle thing, heh.
You line breaks are a little wierd, if you broke it up more, it would last longer in the mind of the reader and then the person below me would be happy. -
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thanks...! I'm always experimenting with line breaks, searching for the most effectively universal presentation... that other ellipse? Phah! I like my new one- a 'prompt' for the readers to pause and ponder, to let their imaginations drift away (assuming they have one), or that the writer is thinking, or letting the thought sink in... like this... pausing for a mental breath... and not just as a mere place-holder for dull verbiage in the middle of a run-on sentence, like that old and under-functional one... (that means time to ponder and let your mind drift away); and if it is a mental punchline that the reader will 'get' after a few moments, then ...! Now nobody said an intelligent writer cannot add enlightened functionality to the primitive and still-formative punctuation of this evolving language- I've already written the Modern Language Association to tell them to get with the program, but you know how stuffy, immovable bureaucrats too timid to come out of the shadows are, fat chance, so screw-em..., let them catch up! Where do you think their rules came from, anyway, stone tables from God? Nay! From stuffy bureaucrats prodded by creative types! (and thanks for prodding me!)
Now the MLA is for professional research papers. The only place for such an ellipse there is where an issue is as yet unresolvable, and the writer offers the reader a moment to ponder, and drift away...
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This is a humorous piece of writing. You actually got my mind reading in the male and female voices
I enjoyed this, it ended too soon for my liking. Thankyou for sharing.
Keira
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thanks for the motivation...!
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