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Heart of drops

Misted views
befuddled by haze of love,
how my feelings
take shape
of heart
on panes of life,

only to fade away
in water dripping down.

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  • Reptile Lady gold member
    April 15

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    I felt this one the thoughts the sadness
    its hard
    best wishes to you
    Julie


    • crimsondew
      April 15
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      glad you could feel the moment and feelinsg I wished to portray with this piece


  • thepoetssoul
    April 7

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    This is a fantastic piece of poetry.
    Love the images you have created.
    And the metaphor is top notch, well done
    Be blessed in all you do.

    Tony


  • Beverlynohime
    November 22, 2008

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    awww this is a beautiful piece! I always love making pictures on car windows. It makes me extra happy.


  • Harrisham Minhas
    August 8, 2008
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    That's profound.
    Nicely expressed.


  • PoeticSymphony
    June 19, 2008

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    Really nice poem, goes well with the picture. it is short and simple and i really like it. The last couplet at the end finishes the poem off nicely. really enjoyed reading it.
    all the best
    amy xx


  • Aliya Abbas
    June 16, 2008
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    excellent

    very good depiction. loved the way u took it. very philosophical one.


    • crimsondew
      June 17, 2008
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      Thanks Aliya...You will know what this feels like...more than anyone else


  • crazymomma
    June 12, 2008
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    lovely imagery and nice metaphores.


  • checkmate
    June 12, 2008

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    wow. this is simply amazing I loved this- you have penned this so beautifully! you deserve gold!! this was honestly awesome!!

    sorry for the thousand exclamations I think I am in love with your words.

    -char-


  • sailor ptolema
    June 12, 2008

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    BRAVO!BRAVO!

    I love this!!!! its so sad, yet quite poignant!

    wonderful, wonderful!
    good luck in the contest!!!!!!! !!


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    June 12, 2008
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    i like the imagery this piece possesses. very good.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    June 12, 2008
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    Brilliant imagery in this well penned piece.. a sad write!


  • PerfectImperfection
    June 12, 2008

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    Wonderful imagery here!!! Very well penned piece of beauty in sadness... I loved this! Great take on the prompt!!!


  • transit
    June 12, 2008
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    wow!

    this piece contains sdness, happiness, depth and simplicity all into one. I love how things are not clear but murky and hazy.

    "on panes of life,"

    a good phrase relating well to the picture. The last two lines captured the essence of the whole poem and really made it your own. Good luck!

    transit~

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