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Teenage Crush

Once upon a time
there was a *girl*

She wasn't the /prettiest/
girl,
but none the less she
was |one|

She attended {school}
and did well
(for a while at least)
until he came along.

It was because of him
she started to
s
l
i
p

and

f

a

l

l

she went for him

with his /bad boy/ ways.

 not caring about

foolish consequences

 that would come.

It happened at

a party

|one| night.

She, hopelessly in {love}

followed him ^ up ^

to his |= room =|

~~ a month  later she finds  out she's pregnant ~~

she tells him

and he runs a

..>......>..mile.>........>

Now she's

alone

with a babe

that she must raise

on her |own|

All for a foolish

teenage crush

Author notes

I appoligize for the latest heart broken poems and stuff. and this is fictional lol

Dirty Pretty ♥

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  • Scyphon
    November 11, 2008

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    Excellent poem, great delivery from start to finish and a great message within it. Keep writting please!!!

  • Page Deleted.
    July 8, 2008

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    I thought this poem seemed familiar, but it wasn't until I scrolled down to the comments that I realised why

    I liked this the first time I read it, and I still like it now, it's got a great storyline to it.

    Now onto more specific things:

    ***She wasn't the /prettiest/
    girl,
    but none the less she
    was |one|***
    --> my favourite part of the poem was this

    ***followed him ^ up ^***
    --> I liked the ^ up ^ part of this, very clever

    ***too his |= room =|***
    --> should be *to* not *too*

    ***~~ a month later she finds out she's pregnet ~~***
    --> *pregnant* not *pregnet*

    Thanks for entering and best of luck.

    Keira
    -- blackwood.baby


  • Morphine Mayhem
    June 12, 2008

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    No, very loveable

    And very nice, i love the way its written, Gaw speachless if only girls would take this as a slap in the face...


  • Sir Squigglim
    June 12, 2008
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    fictional but unbelievably amazing.

    i found this /amazing/ and by the way, UNBELIEVABLE background! darn, you're good at this!

  • Page Deleted.
    June 12, 2008
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    this poem is great

    and the background is gorgeous, did you make it?
    except im not sure if it comes up the same way in your browser, but in mine it has the red line running through the words, which makes some of the words a bit hard to read.

    Keira

    • Noir mariposa...x gold member
      June 15, 2008
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      Thank you very much ^^

      Yeah I made the background ~ still modifying the side of it (shows you what happens when you've only had four BG's lol)


  • Georgia La Mariposa
    June 12, 2008

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    This is fantastic!! I loved the way you presented it in the DP category and the story is sadly so real in this day and age. Great write and glad it's fictional lol and I loved the bg too

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