Vanity, Oh Vanity, how you curse the world with Lust
The pure try to teach us of true love
But you turn their words to dust
Vanity, Oh Vanity, how you lord over the earth
bringing men to their knees in envy
showing what the women are truly worth
Vanity, Oh Vanity, you hide your truth inside
You wear the dress of violet
When violet is the color of your Pride
Vanity, Oh Vanity, you're Gluttonous for more
you think you're looking at a beauty
when you're looking at a whore
Vanity, Oh Vanity, you're Anger is mirror thin
you see behind you in reflection
the creation of your sin
Vanity, Oh Vanity, you have the power to avoid your demise
but you are driven to the pain of Sloth
As you cannot avert your eyes
Vanity, Oh Vanity, do you let others see
what you call your beauty
Or do you have far too much Greed
Vanity, Oh Vanity, it is so obviously true
the Seven Deadly Sins are walking
in a purple dress like you
Author notes
the picture is "Vanity" by Marta Dahlig
A contest entry
- Voluminous Veils of Violet Vanity by DayDreamMuse.
1500 points, ended June 15, 4 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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I agree with my cojudge on this one. Although you portray Vanity as a man, which is not how the prompt goes, I have to admit that making Vanity a travestite and connect him to all the other sins is quite creative and the rhyme is quite good. Simple, yet affective. I also have to add that I liked the repetitive beginnings of the stanzas. Very chant-like. Quite good. Great entry!
DD -
I really like the originality displayed here...
personifying vanity as male, incorporating all
of the other sins and using an lamenting repetition.
Wonderful work that flowed well and expressed the
theme aptly in the right voice and colour. Blue
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