sometimes fate tempts the devil himself
takes all of lifes jars on a high shielded shelf
gathering dust as time marches through
but the jars are what make us the who
sometimes tragedy strikes at the best
removing our comfort at evils behest
churning and yearning replacing the zone
leaving us wanting, lost and alone
sometimes it seems like theres no fighting left
the soul fades to black, shriveling, bereft
the passion replaced by a memories forelorn
the longing for answers, the rip in the torn
but the light is always there
it breaks the pain in our despair
just look to the future, take a first leap
sow for the love of a life that we reap
sometimes dark forces reserve the best seat
for the play called humanity strumming its beat
as the demons strike chords of revenge and deep hate
leading the chorus with lives as the bait
sometimes the puppeteer twists up the strings
leaving the puppet all tangled by things
performance and talents that suffer the blow
of the master well never alive ever know
sometimes when its darkest the dawn is delayed
a fight for the universe cunningly played
the baphomet laughs as it moves all the pieces
crumpling some and increasing the creases
but the light is always near
illuminates the source of fear
tomorrows the next yesterday
so take it and own it today
Author notes
sometimes things happen that are so profound for good or bad that we cant even imagine how life was when it was normal. i wrote this poem for someone who lived through tragedy and inspired me with their words
A contest entry
- For New and Trophy Lacking by Blooming Poet.
300 points, ended July 16, 2008, 61 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - What big nose you have! by RawrSmileBabyPlz.
450 points, ended June 30, 2008, 88 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pic Inspired: Goth, Dark Fantasy Writers...Points may Increase! by Ephiphany.
800 points, ended July 18, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Gimme Gimme by SaviDropKick.Oi..
455 points, ended August 2, 2008, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pre-Write Extravaganza by piccola.
1000 points, ended August 17, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Hope is But a Lost Dream by Lost Vampyre Angel.
600 points, ended September 15, 2008, 52 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Come One, Come All - The Circus Is In Town by lowercase prelude.
4000 points, ended October 15, 2008, 105 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
1 - 15 of 15
-
this is a very beautiful poem here
thank you for entering this your rhyme is flawless and i adore your hope and darkness mixed together!
thanks for entering
all my love
kitty xxx -
Nice entry, thank you. sometimes dark forces reserve the best seat
for the play called humanity strumming its beat
as the demons strike chords of revenge and deep hate
leading the chorus with lives as the bait ... astounding -
good luck,
Love,
Mouse -
The rhyme is solid, and unforced - very nice. The write as a whole is very thought provoking and sincere in its appeal; to listen, to dream, to hope...
"sometimes tragedy strikes at the best
removing our comfort at evils behest
churning and yearning replacing the zone
leaving us wanting, lost and alone"
I especially loved those lines. A piece filled with meaning, and actual depth. Excellent write!
-
I loved the imagery in this piece. Very creative thanks for entering and good luck. -e
-
Amazing
this is very good. Its very well written and i liked it alot. my favorite part is when you said "sometimes when its darkest the dawn is delayed a fight for the universe cunningly played the baphomet laughs as it moves all the pieces crumpling some and increasing the creases" that was worded so well. thanks for entering my contest i wish you the best of luck.
..<3..
Shelly
-
This is a very well penned poem, you said so much..also the rhyming is amazing, not forced at all. Thanks for entering
-
Excellent write here
As though the vision before us we so vividly see so does their pain play out in their memories . Touch life anew and find in yourself a brand new you
-
Yeah this poem totally blew me away do to numerous things.
-
I love it. IT reminds me
-
sow for the love of a life that we reap
best line i've read in awhile. i like the ideas behind this poem. you're a very strong writer for someone so young. keep writing, you'll keep growing as you experience more and more your writing will grow with you.
i'm impressed by you darkwell.
-
impressive words! they touch me->
these words touch me and give me hope; not for me but a sense of hope for you and those that follow you as you continiue to paint with a pen, forego the brush, and speak what needs to be said...
i am truly touched by your words in ways i will never be able to explain. the second stanza, fourth line, rips into me as if it were my blood scrawled there rather than your thought forever embossed there."leaving us wanting, lost and alone." THAT IS JUST FRIGGIN PROFOUND! i count myself lucky to know now even that line so perfectly it does describe the broken soul that is me...
i would like to tell you more of me, but that is reserved for another day, another conversation...
you should read my poem titled "fate" and you might see how closely what you write now coincides with what i wrote then. thank you for sharing your thoughts with me! i am in debt to you...
-dev
-
its great
ur poems great didnt understand it but still good
-
This is brilliant, and comforting to people in real pain. You have a lot of talent and you are also obviously an amazing person.
I have this sort of depth in me, but I can not express it, nor would I know how to gain the skills- but that is why I am on the road of poetry, because one day I want to be able to write poems that can truely reach people now and for all time. This sure is that type of poem. VERY well done. Duana
-
Thank-you
Each and every person experiences pain that seems as if it will not cease, this is a part of life. Recognizing that the suffering will end is one of the first steps to reaching the light. Your poem expresses that, and it is a beautiful and lifting message to those who do not realize this. I love it. Thank-you for this. For once i actually forgot this same thing and to read this and remember is wonderful. I can probably sleep tonight because of you. Thanks Darkwell.
Adding your comment:
1 - 15 of 15
