"Daddy, Daddy!"
I love you
"Lynette, Lynette!"
I love you, too
"Daddy, Daddy!"
I love you more
"Lynette, Lynette!"
I love you to the moon and stars and back...
He's never done drugs
He's never hit mommy
He's the perfect Daddy
For me
Author notes
Lie: My dad loved me, he was harmless, and he never touched drugs.
Truth: He never knew me, He always hit my mom, the overdose killed him...
A contest entry
- Lie to Me by Justin.
875 points, ended June 17, 2008, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Wow... I'm sorry that you had to go through this. You chose a very bold and daring thing to lie about. For that, I commend you.
Although short, this has a very strong impact. Your usage of the repetitive format at the beginning was a strong choice.
Thank you for your entry!
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I honestly didn't know you would comment, theres so many better poems out there, but think you so much. Yea, my "dad" was very... umm... wrong i guess i could say.
RayneChill
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