Oh my love
I opined you were a core
however you were not
I contemplated you were an epitome
although you were not
I assessed you were the amorousness
yet you were not
I inferred you were the glamour
albeit you were not
and who are you in actuality
I did not know even today
after enduring a whole life with you
Oh my love...
A contest entry
- Character, Analogy, Story by CarolDesjarlais.
875 points, ended June 14, 2008, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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What a picture!
A fitful sleep to be had in that bed for sure. Great pen! An analogy of momentous prose!
My friend you are a jewel!
Jennifer -
What a picture!
A fitful sleep to be had in that bed for sure. Great pen! An analogy of momentous prose!
My friend you are a jewel!
Jennifer
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Is it possible to spend a whole lifetime together and yet not really know who the other is? I think so! By your poem you bring this out...The picture gives an excellent hilight to your poem..The poem emphasizes
really getting to know one another!
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I feel betrayal.
well done.
love the word usage♥
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what an incredible poem....truths lying on their side facing each other. And the picture is absolutely perfect for it.
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this write really shows how we try to find eternal happiness in the fleeting moment or even in fleeting moments of a long duration. thanks.
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...can we ever truly know another?...a golden worded write, my dear friend...Peace, Rhonda
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I do not know whether you would agree with me, however I am delighted to say that for myself, I see this as an answering to the questions in my 'Tears' poem...
Whatever the case, I thank you very much for this, which I see as pointing to very good guidance.
The way we hold the questions blissfully melt in the 'Face of the Beautiful Mystery', where clarity can be found again; perhaps even where questions and answers can be received simultaneously.
Sol *rose
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Wonderful poem my friend..
I assessed you were the amorousness
yet you were not
since I heard your video from your other poem..while I was reading this piece..I heard you reading this too..amazing work my friend..you always amaze me
Ruby
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What a poem, what a story within your lines and what a picture! This poem is one of your best. Great done.
~Sonja~
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