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First Love

You left your knife behind that day
And now we both know why.
But I bet you didn't expect me to
Return it with my
Blood
Caked on the blade.

You want your sins understood
But kept secret safe
So I threw it in your face
With neatly sharpened
Words
And visible scars

I still have that knife
It cuts only lies now

But seriously,
Stop calling.

Author notes

i just didnt feel like i said what i wanted to say in this one. but i had to try anyway, to let out the emotion if nothing else.

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  • Dienush
    June 11, 2008

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    Wow, using knife in that first line is a very impactful way to begin. It wakes me up Especially since, seeing the title, I would have expected something more romantic - but I love the contrast. I like how you seem to focus on this knife for most of the poem - a dangerous object but which can represent insecurity, or strong trust if "left behind". I like how you used it as a metaphor... perhaps for the relationship itself? This has some really raw, well-crafted imagery. And I love the ending - how ironic, to end the metaphor two lines before eending the poem. Saying "but seriously" makes me think the whole "knife" thing was a euphemism, and the ending was what you were secretly building up to. I'm not quite sure, but it sounds like with this poem you're making a point about how intense and insecure a first love is, how some never forget it and others move on... is this what you meant? It may be frustrating to have it come out with a different meaning than intended, but it's beautifully done and meaningful nonetheless. Plus you can always try again Oh, I also absolutely LOVE that you've written about love using the knife motif AND being creative. Wow.


    • joyce emmy
      June 12, 2008
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      first of all let me just say that i love the way u interpreted this poem. poems can be interpreted in lots of ways, and all of them are valid in their own way. however, the way you interpreted this poem was not how i intended it.

      the references to the knife are not figurative or metaphorical. they are completely literal, with the exception of the line that says the knife cuts only lies now.

      and when i say 'but seriously,' its my way of saying, i went on a tangent but now im getting to the main point, which in this case was that i didnt want to talk to that guy any more.

      but i think it would be almost impossible to be able to understand what i was trying to say without either an explanation or a back story. but oh well. as long as it touches people, thats what matters.


  • Rianna Bear
    June 11, 2008

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    sometimes going in with one intention, and writing another can get frustrating? right? but...it sounds like you made a serious statement w/what came out of this write, though! well done and w/such vulgar intensity.

    well done
    rianna