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Chasing Sun Down, In Love With The Moon

The camera smiled into the sun

      above a lake that seemed asleep.

brisk shoulders shuttered,

     shrugging of contrite sighs,
          propping lens gasped of frost,

               closer to voyeuristic eyes

callously, primped orange breaths stilled,

     then slowly dulled,
          baptized by renegade ripple,

               heaven's beacon braced then lulled

heart weeped,

     as saline waste by the thimble full upon arid ground,
          box kites sail edge of serenity,

               then a calm... as the sun touched down

waist high in tide, blue the ocean,

     surrounded by green the forest,
          an oil painting, the scents seduced the loneliness,

               I exhale from Eden's chest

raptured in catatonic state,

     behold, the moon whispers lullabies,
          wooing love's birds peeping from branches,

               enchantment in their eyes

breath be still!

     tranced I became, as beaks bugled odes of love,
          dolphins mimicked child,

               jetting in silver caress of moon above

sanctuary has found company,

     as I rest beside viper charmed,
          who is it... that's able to resist,

               wonders wielding storms,

moving seas without utterance or touch...

     be that a mystery,
          jest springs from mind,

               pardoned, I exhale... and fall asleep







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Photo copyright 2008 by WeAreFireflies. All rights reserved.


In this writ, the line... "propping lens [gasped] of frost," is metaphoric and alliterate, meaning as one exhales in air's chill, lens fog with a soft haze. I hope that this helps understand the phrase a little better

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  • skylark anointed
    July 31, 2008

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    Beautiful language!

    I really enjoyed your delicate dance around the image in the photograph.

    There are only a few things that might need editing...

    Forgive me if I am missing something in this line:

    propping lens [gasped] of frost,

    Given the artistry of the rest of the poem, it is possible that I am overlooking the use of the word 'gasped'. If so, please clarify.

    And also:
    sanctuary has found company,
    as I rest beside viper charmed,
    who is it... [thats] able to resist,
    wonders wielding storms,

    Just needs an apostrophe, probably a simple typo...

    But again, just beautiful!


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    June 26, 2008
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    thank you for re-entry

  • misticmoonlite gold member
    June 26, 2008

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    this is another lovely piece, you sure know how to pen a scenic picture within a picture, thank you for this entry, good luck...
    Lin

  • luvdrkchocolate
    June 17, 2008

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    Oh. This one is really nice too. I liked the pictured that you used for this. But when I read this I imagined you staring at a wonderous oil painting in some muesuem or something like that. Kind of makes me think of a man evaluating himself and his spot in life right now. Really thoughtful.


  • iminlovewidyou
    June 12, 2008

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    beautiful ...just simply baeutiful..and i love ur imagery


  • jcat gold member
    June 12, 2008

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    I agree that the imagery was breath taking!!! You did more than bring that picture to life....you brought forth its very essence.....The vital life force of nature sprung off the page and hurled itself into the mind of the reader!! Well done and best wishes


  • Midniterose
    June 11, 2008

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    Wow

    The imagery was breath-taking. In each stanza I clung to every word to see the piece of the picture it painted. Your rythm was flowing, too. This is exquisite to the mind.


  • Cannonsfire
    June 11, 2008
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    Such a beautifully descriptive dream. Love, C

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