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Rest In Peace Mommy

Mom, why did you have to leave me so soon? We had so much planned for the

future. Now I'm without a mother physically. You left a mother with one less

child, a daughter with no mother, and a husband with no wife. But, you know

what Mom...You are strong, and you are a fighter. You have been in

WORST situtations and have made it through.



You shocked us all with your passing. Mommy, I want you to know that I will

always love you, and always miss you. You have been the greatest thing I

have ever had. Everyone is so proud of Dad & I, and how strong we are being,

but you know what....I physically look strong and focused but deep inside I am

torn apart, confused, and hurt.



I promise you Mother, I will make you proud

and I will make you smile. I will become something

BIG, mark my word. Dad and I will make it

through, with your blessings. One day I WILL

have the pleasure of seeing you again. Mom, I know you know I will be okay

and I know you know I will make it through because now you left me...not

before...not later but NOW.



You left me in the

GREAT hands of my father and family. All I can say now

is THANK YOU MOM. THANK YOU for having me,

growing me up to what I am at this time and thank you for always being

behind me 100% and you will always be with me in my heart forever and

always. On the sunniest day, and the stormiest night I will be thinking of you.

For the rest of my life...no matter how happy I may look, Mom you will always

be on my mind.



From the day you left me, I have been confused and broken up

inside, and I will not lie, I will ALWAYS be like this. What

can I say now? They always say everything happens for a reason but the good thing that I know

Mom, is that your not suffering anymore. Your not feeling pain, or going through

what you have been going thru for all these years now. You are happy and

ALL THE FAMILY knows it is true. So Mommy, I can keep writing and writing

about you, but WORDS will NEVER be enough to express my true feelings.



I LOVE YOU MOM & MAY YOUR SOUL REST IN PEACE

Author notes

This is not exactly a poem, but more of a piece of writing. I wrote this a couple weeks after my Mother passed away.

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  • Silly Rabbit.
    July 4, 2008

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    This is so beautiful. I can feel your pain and the love just screams out from the words. This is absolutely beautiful. I'm sorry for your loss.
    Keep up the great work and thanks so much for sharing.


  • peridotPixi
    June 19, 2008
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    oh yeah and good luck in the other contests you have this poem entered into ~Amy

  • peridotPixi
    June 19, 2008

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    This poem is a wonderful dedication to a person you love, congratulations on your bronze, as always keep up the wonderful writing, ~Amy


  • HiddenByTheDark
    June 16, 2008
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    good write and im sorry for your loss


  • Connor Blackbird
    June 14, 2008

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    My condolences; I am sorry you had a reason to write this.

    I will keep my 'constructive' thoughts brief as I am sure your thoughts were not on mechanic or metaphor here. In general (that is, were it not for the subject matter) I would suggest less telling and more showing, as the saying goes. Sometimes we feel most powerfully the emotions we are not supplied. Secondly, while I did not, of course, say that poets could not use bold, italics, or otherwise 'emphasis' effects, it sometimes seems like a bit of a crutch - if the words are powerful enough the visual aid may not be needed.

    Just a few thoughts. Thanks for entering.

  • kales4
    June 14, 2008

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    thank you for entering my contest. I was just wondering if in the first stanza the word "Worst" should be Worse? This poem is so deeply emotional and i have to give kudos to you for puting onto paper such an intense emotional portrayal, especially in the time fram you did. I really enjoyed the fact that some words were underlined and italics and bold. It helps to emphasize your points and seems almost as though those parts should be screamed which corelates to the theme very much. I'm very sorry for the loss you have been through. Losing someone close to you if very tough, but i imagine losing a mother is undescribable. All the best and good luck


  • Shya
    June 14, 2008

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    This is a beautiful poem. (It's a poem if it's from the heart.) It's touching and heartfelt and filled with emotions. Good write. Thanks for entering my contest...


  • emo001
    June 12, 2008
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    remember shes always there its only when you belive that shes not there thats when this poem ends


  • SomethingPoetic
    June 12, 2008
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    good job. I am sorry for your loss


  • Yarri
    June 11, 2008
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    It gets me everytime

    This poem always tugs at my heart strings when I read it. It's so full of emotion and experience it's more than just a piece of writing, it's a testament to your mother's life an' legacy. Beautiful writing as always. I'm sure you'll do well reading this at the one year. Keep strong KG <3


  • Heartless Angel
    June 11, 2008
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    wonderful

    I'm sorry about your mother. But i always say that some of our best poems come out of our tragedies. This is a wonderful gift you gave your mother and I'm sure that she is smiling down with pride. May her soul find peace and may you find peace in your soul.


  • dreamdragon6484
    June 11, 2008
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    Tears Falling & Heart Breaking

    This is an awsome write. It is so heartfelt and heartbreaking, I lost my mother a few months ago and understand every word. On the outside I am fine, but no one knows what turmoil I go through inside everyday.
    I think we may be kindred spirits.
    Good luck in this contest, again awsome write.

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