Starlight sings of all time passed,
and rituals locked 'way for the ages.
Stormy lights and foamy sea tales
play a once unknown melody.
Rises and falls as notes come to pass;
as such like an ocean in the
calm hours of dusky evening.
Ajoining motions unlike any others.
Unspoken beauty from far away reaches;
much like a once hidden hollow...
One my tale does know.
My heart lurches as the music swells,
for I am taken aback by emotions.
Sorrows for what has been lost,
elation for what we have gained,
and peace in what miniscule
solace I have discovered.
The star of Sirius has seen all to see
and it is he who started this tale.
Not from his mind
but from a small place we know naught of.
Maplewood city was the name,
way back in this when.
People were far and few between
and naught horrid was dwelt upon.
This was a time and place
for happiness and fellowship.
Author notes
Well, for some reason I am getting into story poems lately. So here's another for you.
Okay, Sirius in this particually poem, is the STAR!! NOT the guy from Harry Potter. Say it with me. Star, staaaarrrrrrrr, S-T-A-R! Okay? Great.
The rest speaks for itself. I will be working on this one for a while.
I am trying to see if I can accomplish an epic or a mock-epic.
Wish me luck!
Comment honestly please. But don't be rude. CONSTRUCTIVE CRISTISM is welcome. But don't bash me; I work hard.
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ooooh I really like the background, and all things astronomical. love the eyeball effect of the galaxy image. Your poem sings like the starlight. A nastalgic, sit on the porch swing kind of feel. I expecially like the sentiment: "elation for what we have gained, and peace in what miniscule
solace I have discovered." That sings to me a necessary tune. And swings well on the porch, too.
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Ah, I never saw any of the Harry potter films so your poem has less meaning for me.
But I can read it simply for the beauty of the words, their beat, the choices you made, which are good.
I guess I better go rent the movie.
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This doesn't have anything to do with Harry Potter. I was writing from the point of veiw of the star. I have still yet to finsh it though.
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I'm sorry, apparently I mis-read another comment. I apologize.
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Quite alright. That person just didn't pay attention to the author's notes. Which I just discovered had a typo. Which could account for the confusion, but it's all fixed now.
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Nor did I pay attention to it. So much for reading at 6 a.m. lol
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As I said, quite alright. I do that sometimes too.
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I'm not into Harry Potter But I do enjoy stories and like the starry heavens. Enjoyed this write.
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This was a great write. I can't wait until you finish it. It is a very deep poem.
Khanda Sethra Avarita
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I really like this one so far! It's...deep...like the reaches of space! Haha!
Oh, and of course, the first thing that popped into my head was Sirius Black. lol JK Rowling should know better than to mess with our heads. But whatever. I really like it so far!! :]
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