When we make love,
mother earth cries out in joy
as souls unite and all outside influences
become insignificant; we enter a magical space,
a realm of union and bliss, a realm where hearts beat as one
and souls merge upon plains as yet unexplored. When we make
love, we travel through all boundaries of time and space as
the bonds of love grow stronger and all other limitations
disappear into a haze of passion and sensuality, as
we share a unique bond that comes only in
that moment when eyes meet, and
worlds merge, and hearts
forever join in the
act of true
love!
In a list
A contest entry
- The Erotic Challenge FINAL Round (Season 6) by Master Ktulu.
3500 points, ended June 17, 2008, 3 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Spelling/grammar/punctuation=19
presentation/creativity=20
how well you handled the challenge=20
'grab me' effect=20
overall=20
Total 99/100
Damn..........just that one little error, this was well worth reading, you have done a great job with this poem -
Smiles and thinks given what we did together just before you wrote that it is sweetly romantic ... though there may be meanings than a heart that can be attached to that shape. Well done darling
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purrs ever so softly as You leave Your mark on this page... giggling and visualizing pretty butterflies and all kinds of magical symbols... thank You Mistress... Your words mean more to me that You could ever know!
naids
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Spelling/grammar/punctuation = 19
one tiny error (al should've been all)
presentation/creativity = 20
AMAZING!
how well you handled the challenge = 20
'grab me' effect = 20
overall = 20
TOTAL = 99/100
Amazing, truly amazing! You have set a soft pace to this one not only with the shape of the write, but with your words as well
The repetition of the opening words in the middle there added to its impact and I enjoyed reading this one so much I actually read it again!
Outstanding job done here, I commend you not only on how well you handled the challenge, but the fact that you added your own touch to this and made it completely yours! WELL DONE!!!!!!
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Spelling/ grammar/ punctuation: 19
Missed an "l" in all. Only error I could find ... pity about that really!
Creativity/ presentation: 20
Plus 10 for the heart shape (if I could I would give you that extra 10).
How well you handled the challenge: 20
Brilliant piece - filled with eroticism and spirit. Fantastic.
Grab me effect: 20
You had me right from the start. Once again, one of my fave pieces in this challenge.
Overall: 20
Total: 99
It really was a pity about the one spelling mistake! -
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i really need to stop writing in the early morning hours.. laughs
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Spelling/grammar/punctuation = 19.5
I think you have a mis-spelled word here, I think the al in "and al other limitations" should be all?
Presentation/creativity = 20
Very creative, I love the heart shape form and I know they are difficult to master...well done, great flow, excellent job!
How well you handled the challenge = 20
'Grab me' effect = 20
Overall = 20
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Total = 99.5
**Master Ktulu**
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