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Glass bottle green hues

warn and warm the earth

greys, in low lying formations

stalk the prelude

of cobalt edged

meanderings.

 

Spinning into updraft

of extreme cold

rotating collapse

of spent lovers.

 

Crept silently

whispers of wisps

deeply they seek

without being seen

so clearly.

 

So hard not to notice

the trunk of debris

shatters silence

the horn of warning

pay no heed.

 

Inspiring from afar

deadly if too close

so it goes

white green water 

wall of high speed fog...

 

lifts up, sets down

selectively

as spent lovers

regrets while embracing

unstable wishes

come and gone...

 

praying treetops

bow down

pay homage to 

unreckoned force

so too, trunks swept

from earth-

foundation of love's grace

as though it did not matter.

 

Stillness reigns before

mass activity

what force is this?

That rips the bonds-

 

no force of blood

shatters glass green

in its' wake.

 

 

 

 

 


 

 

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  • poeticweaver gold member
    August 4

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    Excellent Write,

    So many deep images that you reveal within each passing line that captivates the reader within me. Like the way you worded this, very good choice of words indeed! Thanks for sharing your talent here, bravo sweet soul, shine on, and keep up the great works!

    -Timothy


  • Ronztrek gold member
    June 30

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    Ya, what Bue said! lol

    Such an amazing piece with elements of earth and soul in-twined. You are so gifted with such talent and natural ability to bring your work to life. A piece well worth the read. Thanks for sharing

    (Just teasing Blue, awesome comment!)


  • Blue Rew silver member
    June 29

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    This is a brilliant fusion of nature, colour,
    force, and feeling. It enfolds the reader in
    vibrant vision, catapulting the mind into
    the eye of a storm, the deep breath before
    tumultous exhale, the pause before the unleashing.
    ...and the final stanza frames for me an aftermath,
    a moment of reflection on what just passed. Blue

  • Excellent!

    WOW! I'm speechless. Truly speechless. I really like what you have so far. I truly feel the words . . . it is as if they are truly speaking and have action. I think that you could just leave it as it is if you wanted. It seems complete to me, but then again we both have differing opinions, which isn't a bad thing.