I see you move
I watch the way your body
Sways when you walk
Every moment
I fall deeper
Your eyes hypnotize
Intoxicate
I want to get closer
I want to stand here
And stare at you
I would
Chase you to the ends of the world
If for just one second
I could have one simple kiss
I should let go
But without you
I’m incomplete
But
With you
I’m perfectly
Incomplete
Author notes
You can have you own interpretation of this but what I got from this was the feeling of loving someone you can only have as a friend. It hurts that that is all they'll ever see you as but it's better then nothing. You incomplete without them but in the limited friendship your still incomplete but more perfectly so. Originally though I wrote it for a contest, inspired by hanging by a moment by lifehouse. option 9-a.
A contest entry
- Fall Me In Love. by Pretty Britty.
1400 points, ended June 29, 2008, 32 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Dear Friend: I Love You by SomeonesToySoldier.
550 points, ended June 12, 2008, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 10 options for the creative poet (3) by bananasfoster42.
700 points, ended June 17, 2008, 34 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Thank you so much,
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Looking back,
I know I could never appreciate this poem more than I do right now.
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You speak for the ones who cannot speak for themselves!
BRRRRILLIANT WRITE!!!
Annie
♥♥♫♥♥
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Whoaaaa. That's like....whoa.
Kimmie... you have no earthly idea about how amazingly talented you are. It's like, amazingness, all wrapped in in perfection. You, of all people, know that I went through that with a few guys, and I'm over all but one of them (which SUCKS, because I don't like him, yet I do!) and I love how you're incomplete both ways, and that is just such s great way to look at it, I love it so much!
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i can defnintely relate to this. it's an immensely sucky situation! thanks for the entry!
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Oh I perfectly understand what you mean by perfectly incomplete. When I first saw the title I wasnt sure if it was really gonna tie into the poem but you did it wonderfully. And the poem itself was just incredable. I was really impressed and this was exactly what I was looking for. Thank you for entering it into my contest.
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Mmm this piece is interesting,
I've never heard of someone being perfectly incomplete
when they have the one they love
but then again
love is different for each of us!
In your author notes you say it's about being in love with a friend?
http://allpoetry.com/contest/2407717
^I think you would do well in my friend's contest,
so please considering entering.
Nice write
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