Guard down, mind free, I can't let go,
It's too hard for me
Thoughts rushing, Mind racing,
Over thinking, Stomach sinking,
Am I really going insane?
Only if I could..
Release these strains,
and Discover the peace,
I will finally be...
at ease.
Author notes
Picture prompt + 10 lines
Picture Prompt:
http://allpoetry.com/contest/2409071
A contest entry
- - Feelings of Weightlessness - by Desire.
700 points, ended June 14, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Thank You!!
Thank You for Your entry: Constantly holding
This piece tugged hard at Spirit and while I was reading which I did several times~
Interestingly enough I instantly saw a Heart when I first opened it up and strange as it appears- It was so vivid in my Mind~ I was also seeing what looks like Victoria Falls~ and reference to the *feeling* one gets upon viewing such a sight
I'm being shown what looks like a basement and appears to be inside a house...I am being shown the *trap door* and then steps going into darkness
Whether metaphor or symbolism~ I was being shown this~
Also being shown a hand scribbling- with fingers grasping pen tight...just scribbling furiously...as if just letting go~ and hearing word: Oxycotton
but hearing words: false relief- and being shown a pool of liquid and it spiraling down a drain
Hopefully that makes sense
Powerful images You have brought forth
These words grabbed and pulled~
Release these strains, and Discover the peace
Unique Voice spoken~
Thank You for sharing Your Heart also Spirit!
Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
**Judging will be done shortly...
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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wow... love the shape of this poem!!! it completely goes with the words!!! You did a great job on this!!!!
Hugs,
Beth
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