Eye believe in symmetry, two, four, six, four, two.
Your art came to the backporch of my mind; through the eye.
Eye believe in symmetry, two, four, six, four, two.
Within your body, built by perfect curves of DNA,
there lay hidden bricks for the five, five, five.
True meanings of nature still stay cloaked; to the eye.
Eye believe in symmetry, two, four, six, four, two.
Art by thee, hands of love, laid like carpets on our crops,
in poverty of knowledge, empty holes will be filled.
Built by our hands of strength, seen as divine by time,
for it's not in our hands, it all lies in our sight.
Eye believe in symmetry, two, four, six, four, two.
True meanings of nature still stay cloaked; to the eye.
Within your body, built by perfect curves of DNA,
there lay hidden bricks for the five, five, five.
Eye believe in symmetry, two, four, six, four, two.
Your art came to the backporch of my mind; through the eye.
Eye believe in symmetry, two, four, six, four, two.
Author notes
image from;
http://www.enlightenedbeings.com/pix/cropcircle9.jpg
A contest entry
- Eyes by BabyBun.
450 points, ended June 19, 2008, 36 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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hard to follow yet you have to read it again.... "True meanings of nature still stay cloaked; to the eye." was my favorite line. well written.
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AMAZING WORK!!! I just love this - it is my kind of poetry. Mysterious, challenging, beautiful. Wow!
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I agree with Durlon-
It flows wonderfully and the imagery is fantastic.
I liked how you used "eye" instead of "I"
Good job and I hope you win!
Thanks for sharing!
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well done
Flows well. Good imagery. Interesting presentation. I especially like: "Your art came to the backporch of my mind." Comment on your comment: You may well be Norwegian, but you are certainly not stupid. Regarding "thee", maybe if you put a comma after it.
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A very interesting and unusual take on the prompt.
'Art by thee hands of love, laid like carpets on our crops,
in poverty of knowledge, empty holes will be filled.'
I particularly liked these lines and the thought of love creating art from crop circles. The somewhat esoteric references added to the mystique.
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Interesting
A bit hard to follow for ME. Probably no one else though. You have THEE in the first stanza that I think yould be thy or thine. And strength is mispelled. This took nothing away from your write just an FYI.
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Thanks!
Ooops. I actually thought strenght was the right way
But I'm just a stupid Norwegian, so I'll bow down to your demands. Oh, I was scared to use that poetry word, is "Thee" not the same as "The"?
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