Amidst the calling of my future's path,
I yearn for freedom.
Simplicity within itself is complicated,
While the life I know seems to be ending.
The faces I've grown attached too,
Are moving forward with excitement
And I can only wish that they would remember me.
Devoured by expectations of success,
There is little room for weakness,
In a world of constant struggle.
Author notes
This is speaking of how I am feeling in regards to graduation and school ending. Instead of worrying about the cats, or an assignment not handed in, I must worry about finances and my future. I long to breathe in relief.
A contest entry
- graduation by Dienush.
1550 points, ended June 15, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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My thoughts exactly, even though this was a little straightforward for my taste. I can feel this poem, though I'm not sure if it's due to poetic strength or just the fact that I feel exactly the same. I wish you luck, though. I think what we should do is find peace and freedom in the only place where they are true, that is within ourselves. But I know it's way, way harder than it sounds. Thank you for entering my contest.
~Diana
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This poem shows your stress and worry, and it also has a depth of sadness to it. Who isn't happy to see everything ending, and scary things beginning.
GREAT job
diggin it majorly
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yup, one step away from one world and another step into a bigger world. it's exciting, yet scary w/all that one has to deal with ...as an adult w/adult responsibilities.
congrats on graduating!
one stepping stone in life!
♥rianna
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I can relate to this, and i know so many others who can as well. This is an amazing write of which you've conveyed your feelings and thoughts flawlessly.
Great job. Ily.
<3
~IvoRy
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