Alone in the darkness I dance
Here I see the sounds
And hear the colors
In rhythmic communion
With my sisters and brothers
P.L.U.R.R. is the order of the night
In a place where the World's troubles disappear out of sight
Replaced by the heavy bass and strobe light...
It was then that I felt her hands lock themselves around my waist
The strands of her long rainbow neon hair were close enough to taste
She had a face whose beauty rivaled Helen of Troy
And a smile that was devilishly coy
The colors of her laser light complexion
Left me in her trance
While the dancing hues of her eyes
Brought me to her lips
The starving fervor of her kiss
Caused my hands to lose altitude
Moving from her breasts and falling to her hips
My lips followed
I drank now from her neck
Even her sweat was as sweet as the morning dew
Our bodies soon synced themselves to the pulse
That pervaded our very souls
A pulse that called for us to be free
And fly like the stars dancing in the sky
We finally broke free of the bonds that imprisoned our flesh
And loosed ourselves upon each other
Reveling in this new chaotic fusion
This carnally spellbinding delusion
That was slick like oil and sticky like kandy
And all at once dark and bright
Between the two of us
A new tempo was made
And soon our own song was played
And in the dominion of beats and sights
A nation of glow-sticks and laser lights
Our love was made
As our brothers and sisters rocked and swayed
As we reached the end of our first journey
A new transcendence was achieved
She and I were now new beings
Different creatures from a species known by all...
We were lovers
Forever related
Eternally sated
And filled with glee
Our love rave ensued for all to see
Amidst a storm waving glow-sticks
Our spirits swirled
Over and over we renewed our vows of love
For all to see
And to bear witness to this new chaotic fusion
This carnally spellbinding delusion
That I like to call
A Raver's Fantasy...
Author notes
Well it has been awhile (again) since I have posted something new and I figured it might as well be this.
Anyways, this write is based on a dream I had about making love during a rave. I had actually been playing with the idea of writing a piece for some time now. With that said, keep in mind that this was intended to come across as a chaotic scene as if my mind was all a blur.
So I hope y'all enjoy, and let me now how I did so I can improve on this write as well as on others....
Written while listening to Armin Van Buuren's A State of Trance Episode 224 - Song 12 Fusion
A contest entry
- Beautifully Sensual. by Poetryintheblood.
450 points, ended June 19, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Touch me with your words. by Ho74pp1eP1e.
525 points, ended September 2, 2008, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Positive Criticism please.... I mean this seriously!!!
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Love it
I do love the image this piece creates, its spell binding I do feel the flow was interupted in a few places but nothing major and well the emotion and rawness and your use of words to describe the passion is amazing.
thanks for sharing
T -
I found this fun, and different. I would never, ever make love at a rave, but making love on E was something I will never forget. Well done. Good luck.
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These words here
that ye hath pen
has my mind
and senses in a spin
From start to
the steaming end
you made love
as the music and colors blend
Yes this is a
very hot piece
and who knows
one day it could be in reach
Riftkin
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oh my goodness...
Now that was some dream 
What a great fantasy.. And WOW thanks for sharing!
Great imagery here.
Best of luck in the contest.
Delila
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Thank you for your entry, good luck in my contest, Josie
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You most certainly did an excellent job in giving us your dream. This has made some amazing vivid pictures in the reader's mind as it is read. Excellent, rick
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wow
this was an amazing piece i actually thought i was in a rave for a minute especially since i've been to one
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Excellent Suave Hot Erotica
Okay here I go...you have written a very dynamic read. I have never been to a Rave until now, and it sort of reminded me of my disco years.You did an awesomr job in painting your picture with vivid wording...It was erotic, very classy...which I enjoyed...Thanks for sharing this dream...am sure it was mystical....novy
Glad to see you back
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