Yesterday
i heard
the little pink tongue
of the wind say
take her with you
that we ... were wild
like gull's breath
taking crested waves
and so falling
with ocean spray
as manifest
(our destiny)
we'll both let go
become one ship
with two
tiny white sails
each
taut with breeze
It's different
way out there
there's us
and nobody else
it's just
you'n me ... and the sea
Author notes
for the sea
http://allpoetry.com/poem/5063599
read aloud by Zayra Yves
On Sunday, March 1st/2009 at 4 in the afternoon
at Ernesto's Art Studio in Pt Reyes Station CA 94956
Comments
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captivating
This flows so beautifully it took me almost to the other shore
Lion
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there is so much to this.
when one takes the core of what another person is and assimilates that with the core of who they are and may become when all other diversions and distractions are taken away, at times we are lucky to find that wonderous quality of time that leaves us wanting more.
-- mix in a bit of the world's distractions and we sometimes lose sight of those common things that brought one person to another in the beginning.
there is so much to like about this poem...
Kim
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yes i guess there's a bit of message in there, but what i really focused on was the sound, mouth-feel and "taste" of the words as they slide out of the mouth.
thnx very much for these kind words
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this is really truly beautiful and wonderful! I think I can include it.
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wow and SHIT ... Holy Cow !
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a really beautiful poem.
it takes me there, although, i don't feel cool & crisp at all from this, well, maybe the wind of breaths...but i feel a warm afternoon and the rocking of the sea..what an interesting metaphor for two to become one ship, far away from everything, and just letting go....what a perfect place to be.
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stunning
I know I repeat myself when I say I love the sea. Not the white sandy beaches in Florida, but the craggy English coastlines like in Rebecka.
I was lucky to vacation in Cornwall and Devon in my childhood every year. Listening to the Carpenters on eight track .Three adults,four kids and a dog piled in to the British version of a station wagon. I will go back one day.
your poem is beautiful in simplicity and lulls the reader with the imagery.
Helen
I needed this today...
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i know what you mean ... big rocks and big spray ... cool and crisp
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I love it.. simply.
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~Ecstasy in lyrical Beauty~
Happy New Year, my new old friend.
You’ve just penned
The love that lives in my heart
Once again, your words
Make me feel alive in Cupid’s dart.
All my love to you, and yours, Sharon
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yeah .. kind of like Dream of the Dolphin !
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sensual beutiful and deeply romantic. this is wonderful writing and very evocative. i love the sense that you evoke and that i totally relate to from being in the sea of being cocooned from the rest of the world. love it.
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hey there .. just saw now how tardy i was (am). it is beautiful and i felt beautiful writing it. kiss the blarney for me will ya ?
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what does tardy mean? is that a canadian expression. i have never heard it before?
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I love the sea...and the romance that appears in this poem.
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ty "z" i could never live where the sea was too far away from me.
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I love this profoundly
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ty for your comment, it has a nice soft "oceanly flow" i think. once again, appreciate ur time.
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and so falling
with ocean spray
as manifest
(our destiny)
we'll both let go
become one ship
with two
tiny white sails
I come back every now and again to read my favorites!
And you're still one of them you're words always linger taking me a bit farther in thought...Enjoyed this, you still let you're words roll over you!
~Kimberly~
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hey thnx .. re being back,
thinking back, i think you were the very first one on AP that ever commented on my poetry.
have fun, it's summer !
steve
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The pink tongue of the wind? Two tiny white sails... both of those were great lines. This whole poem so gentle and wonderfully understated.
It really works. The only thing I might say, is that the last two lines just don't hold the delicate beauty of all the rest. You might want to have another look at that.
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god this is totally mangificent...i love it so much...
yeah that's love...the you and me and no one else...a certain power, magnetism and the eyes for each other...
creating their own world without a care in the world.
who can't fall in love with this?
mmmmm...mesmerized
Anna Lee
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there's something special about the sea. we all love it there.
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I read it three times. I love it's winsome and oceanic feeling. The unity, its necessary solitude of each of its pieces, and the sea, our own private treasures allowing us to become one with another, yet true to ourselves.
yes. yes.
Moqui
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i love the little pink tongue and the wild gulls breath taking waves and the crescendo in reaching that peak before the letting go into a lovely sensitive gentle musing on the breeze ...
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I know this vast feeling of nature, Steve, but this is mesmerizing and beautifully sensual, too. Knowing the sea, I often wish I could be near the water and come to set sails (taut?) with another in fresh winds.
It seems the Creator doesn't know anything less than a powerful metaphor in his poetry, but you have a way of disappearing into it like no other poet I know.
~Karen
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