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Ice skating

Ice skating,
I remember now,
I was only ten,
When I learnt
My first jump.


I do,
This was fun,
I can't find it,
The fun,
Not anymore.


A long time ago,

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UNFINISHED!!!!!!

What are the good points and bad points. How can I improve.

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  • pop123
    June 11, 2008

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    What happened now?Anyway,the poem should be more understandable,ok,the second paragraph is hard to get.


  • pop123
    June 11, 2008
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    Ok I really dont want to be hard or anything,but the poem needs a