In-distinguished in an ocean,
as largely laps
deeply welled behind eyes;
in occurrence personally sad
or hugely significant to all,
most often holds its sway
not to spill upon such call
to emotions roughshod over
on a lonely day.
In which clouds still roam as clouds
and still the sun shines on.
River-flowed time has hardened
my keep, while in test.
In the rain, in the rain!
In Your rain in our tears,
how do I kiss you?
How do I hold you?
How do I not associate
another with You?
So beautiful 'the rain' ,
tears
tears gathered
more tears along with the rest.
So strange that such a small thing
which enters by my back door,
brings the one
so quick seated on the throne
to cry, all to cry some more.
This question of fidelity,
failure, direction...
my love.
Is rain sent from the hearing of prayers?
In a list
A contest entry
- In the rain... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
300 points, ended June 23, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Largest Contest On AP!!!! by xxRainbowDawnxx.
3000 points, ended August 26, 2008, 1666 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Welcome any sincere response and critique
Comments
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oh i love the rain, it's magical. i like your last note "Is rain sent from the hearing of prayers?"
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beautiful! tears of sadness,happiness,pain!(No hurt shall hurt like the hurt of a love so perfectly
But when dines love is hurt and in despair)
but the best tears are the tears of LOVE! well done i enjoyed it very much
juliet
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Truthfully, after reading your page and this poem, I can tell you are an artist due to the fact that this poem and many others of yours reflect individuality and a great unique style that you have
Well done for making me smile.
Swim~
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Thank you for giving me one with your kind comment.
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I love the question, is rain sent from the hearing of prayers.
A summer rain is the true sense
That inspires beauty to grow
Profound faith is the true sense
That inspires a poet's holy essence
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Your comment much appreciated.
Thank you
Sol
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I am quite an emotional woman, and my tears do not always mean sadness. I am moved to tears quite often, sometimes a single tear, sometimes a torrential down pour...
It just means I feel...this is such wonderful work, I have not visited in a while, and I am not disappointed. Your words are a gift...and this is no exception.
"So beautiful 'the rain'"
~E.
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This was such a generous and kind comment from you.
Thank you so much.
Sol
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Simply equisite.
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Thank you Rowan.
can I offer you a tissue?
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oops, moved me so much I forgot the 'x', lol. Exquisite. There.
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What a beautiful piece this is ... you express yourself with an edge of rawness that belies the tenderness within and yet you make this accessible ... and we see a vulnerable soul. And we understand. Lovely work, Sol. Go outside ... enjoy the rain!
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Thanks for visiting me and for leaving such wonderful comment... you've put a big smile on my face!
Sol
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Outstanding!
Well my friend you have out done yourself on this one.
Great talent and brought tears to my eyes...
Hugs
~Lisa~
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Thank you so much Lisa!
My best thoughts to both of you.
Sol
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Beautiful flow and rhyme here! Yours is a devoted love you share with us...Uniquely beautifully written! Bravo!
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Thanks Rose Angel... for your 'eyes' and also your comment.
Sol
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Beautiful, I am quite emotional now!
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It occurs to me that our two poems, each read, are perhaps not so far from sharing the very same subject?
Thank you so much for your comment Debz.
Sol
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Sol,
This is so lovely and heartfelt, and right now, perhaps I can relate more to tears comforting me than anything else, which is rather unusual for me, but thank you for putting this in such a beautiful form. You have such a gift!!! Best in the contest, friend!
faith
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It is amazing how much beauty, can even be found in sadness,
crying with the rain, to be dispossessed even into a joy!
Thank you for sharing my friend
Sol
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...Upon reading this I felt a warm tear fall...a strange reaction perhaps and yet...comforting...so much emotion carried here but with warmth and caring...and the question asked at the end is one I too have held silently...thanks for 'saying' it aloud here...I wish you the very best in Prabhu's contest with this write...Peace, Rhonda
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I always enjoy receiving your comments Rhonda.
My thanks to you,
you are such a good friend.
Sol
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Well..you are with a description of the truths of life..and your poetry did it sincerely..thanks for such a wonderful piece....
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Thank you for the honour.
Sol
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You know I think this is beautiful. You have made it far more so since your first draft.
However, don't write about it, DO IT!! 
X
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Sometimes it is so close, so close
still the rain does splendid work!
Sol X
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Well, you'd better come over here then, it's been POURING! I'm not interested in so, so close, I want to hear you sobbing uncontrollably. It's good for you!
X
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So heartfelt, so touching.. Sol..This brought me tears..
So strange that such a small thing
which enters by my back door,
brings the one
so quick seated on the throne
to cry, all to cry some more.
This question of fidelity,
failure, direction...
my love.
Don't know what else to say..
Ruby
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Thank you...
For all that needs to be said.
Sol
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okay, so now you make me cry!!! damnitt
this is beautiful!
love it
Gilly.xxxx
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What WILL become of each of us!
Thank you
Sol x
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who the hell knows, i just know tears are a good release at times, enough to cleanse one's eyes, mind and soul
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