Inspiration, can not be bought
it's something that must be lit.
By someone thats in your life,
someone that's effected it.
All the little things they do
that no one takes a note
you turn into a story,
a whole page you could devote.
Enough of the rhyming game
to hide what i'm trying to say,
i think the world of you
I miss the way:
the edge of your lips curl when you smile
your laugh changes when my jokes aren't funny
you poke you're tounge out to hide the fact that you're alittle shy.
the twinle in your eye
that scruff look you have when you've dragged yourself outta bed early for me
those random messages to show you care
the way you contemplate your stylish facial hair
the way you're voice changes when you talk about your munchkins
that funny temple thing when you eat, i think is so cute, (p.s plus its normal lol)
you make me laugh so hard my cheeks really do ache
and i could go on and on about how i feel about you
the bad and definately the good.
I just wanted to take a chance
to find true love
before it slips through my fingers
and passes me by.
I mightn't be ready, then again neither might you.
But i've never met anyone
that has made me want to change
to be a better person
to want to take a chance.
So i'm going out on a limb
and following my heart
inspired by a you, even though we're a millions of miles apart.
Author notes
For you.
Comments
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I can really relate to the feelings you describe so well using the every day reality of what real love actually is. I also find myself in a similar situation and it sucks not always being with the one person who is myself yet it doesn't mean I can't write and feel so deeply about him.I like the use of free verse but if I were to be pedantic there are a few grammar areas, probably typos - your instead of you're/affected instead of effected.Thanks for expressing such raw emotions in such an effective way. Well done and thanks for sharing.
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well this is a personal poem so im not gonna comment too deeply on the actual poetics, this form i've seen before, but you put your own twist on the topic... the best example of this type of poem is actually a song, 'the nicest thing' by kate nash
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full of all the love, emotions and anxiety that love so often produces within us. Great write..
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aww!
wow this is so incredibly cute.
you make me hopeful that there actually are good people in the world.
a couple comments, you could work on your spelling but that's okay because i know you were just trying to get your message across.
(you use "you're" instead of "your" a lot.)
oh and also in the first stanza, "effected" should be "affected"
and "definately"-->"definitely"
other than those little places, this poem was sooo touching.
that funny temple thing when you eat, i think is so cute, (p.s plus its normal lol)
that line made me smile.
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