Found waiting on shores of Styx
anguish fills a feminine form
for she carries no coins
for ferryman Charon
nor honeyed cakes
to satiate Cerberus
Lost in limbo
she is drenched in regrets
yet no amount of begging
can extinguish
Hell's torrid torch
nor sway Hade's heart...
here she remains,
amongst crows cackling insanity
an insubstantial mist
far from humanity
Author notes
From Greek Mythology:
The newly arrived dead were ferried across the Styx by the avaricious old ferryman Charon, whom they paid with the coin that was placed in their mouths when they were buried. Unauthorized spirits who tried to enter or leave Hades were challenged by the fearful dog Cerberus. The honey cake that the Greeks buried with the dead was intended to quiet him.
Pic Credit:
http://morteque.deviantart.com/art/Burden-Of-Grief-84304314
A contest entry
- Blow My Mind.......PIC INSPIRED by jcat.
1000 points, ended June 13, 2008, 13 entries
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• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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powerful
with powerful words the portrait is vivid
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wow wonderful take, i love how you incorporated the mythology [and gracious to include the explanations for those who may not be familiar], this would have gotten more then HM for me
congrats on the shiney tho 
Tasha
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Very powerfully expressed and with a beauty that never fades. I learnt something new while reading; as I don't know much about Greek mythology, you really filled in the gaps for me. Hehe I feel much more washed with your watery words of brilliance!
Loved your language in this too. Bravo!!
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wow i really love this poem.. it like reaches out from the screen and touches my heart! really enjoyed reading this one hon! keep on penning
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Thank you much and I'm glad you like it!
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Congrats!
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I am a big fan of mythology so I really love the fact that you saw this in the picture!! You did an amazing job and I thank you for entering my contest
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Incredible!
Love the whole storyline. Perfect in every way and the use of the actual names was brilliamt. Best of luck in the contest! I love Greek Mythology! -
Cool thanks for sharing
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This is interesting.
This is very interesting because of the legend and myth. It also reminds me a lot of what William Shakespeare would write. You did very well on this.
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A comparison to Shakespeare, no matter how slight, is a compliment indeed. Thank you for your wonderful comment
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You write a strong mythological piece where the imagery is burned on the reader's mind with all its darkness. It is one of my fav stories Love, C
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Wow bro.. very impressive!! I love all the Greek mythology included in this!!! I knew about the coin in the mouth bit... I'm fascinated by the Hades bit because in biblical terms Hades is Hell... so why they'd want to go there I've no idea!! lol
The feeling of her anquish is palpable and the creeping insanity gave me a chill!!
Awesome write!
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Hmmm when I wrote it I wasn't feeling it as she wants to get into hell. More like pain and anguish from not fitting in anywhere. even if it is hell. she's just stuck without purpose with no where to go...may have to tweak a bit to make my point more clear.
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Ohh sorry bro!! Noooo that comment was about the ANs about spirits trying to get in there.. I didn't think she wanted to.. because the write talks of nothing being able to extinguish hell, so I took it as her not wanting to be in her internal hell....
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Oh!!!!! yeah makes sense now!!
thanks for the great comment sis!! 
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Okay, I don't know much about Greek mythology--the only familiar name is Hades!!
LoL, but I can still recognize a poem by sight (or by reading...LoL)
I notice you begin the poem with 'Found' but the entire poem has a lost and dejected feeling...was this intentional or unintentionally awesome??
"for she carries no coins"
I'm pretty sure you're not talking about money...and if you were, it's still a deep line.
"can extinguish
Hell's torrid torch
nor sway Hades's heart"
Ooh...'extinguish' coincides so well with hell (heh, I rhymed)...great.
"an insubstantial mist
far from humanity"
Interesting and a chilling ending...nice work here.
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