Smoldering edges, falling to the ground
A tear follows his picture down
Onto the water and under the bridge
Ironic how this moment is
From Where we first met
And I end it with this
On this bridge here in town
That heaven built
My nerves shiver violent against a silver blade
As I turn and slowly walk away
Breaking memories, Symphonic sounds
The last memory is this, me turning around
After seeing in her eyes the love that I know
The reason inside I introduced them so
Too late my realization, my stomach seethes
I'm drowning in mists of fiery green
The waters scream, the rain lace down
As I walk towards the farthest edge of town
Once your best friend, the laughter we found
Dissolves in the sins of me holding out
Enter the dreams, this perennial hell
Thats tearing my soul, and beating me down
Jade my heart for all time to see
A musical throbbing engulfing me
Forget a thought, that must never be
Your happy with her, as anyone can see
I pray for your happiness, a story of doves
Though subconsciously obscure, I am forever in love
Author notes
Keke
A contest entry
- Giving Him Up by BlackBloodyRose.
300 points, ended June 13, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This poem is so beautifully written and the emotions are strong throughout it. I could feel the pain and sadness deeply so you have done a nice job putting those emotions onto paper here. Nice job! Blessings, Patty
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"I pray for your happiness, a story of doves
Though subconsciously obscure, I am forever in love"
The last line really brings the whole things home. I found the whole perspective pretty in its painful expression, Good luck on the contest, I really hope you place because this is simply a splendid read
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A great right. i feel your emotion, the 1st line jumps at me! really well done i enjoyed reading it. Ive copied and pasted your poem. Just read it, really its just great.
Breaking Memories
Smoldering edges, falling to the ground
A tear follows his picture down
Onto the water and under the bridge
Ironic how this moment is
From Where we first met
And I end it with this
On this bridge here in town
That heaven built
My nerves shiver violent against a silver blade
As I turn and slowly walk away
Breaking memories, Symphonic sounds
The last memory is this, me turning around
After seeing in her eyes the love that I know
The reason inside I introduced them so
Too late my realization, my stomach seethes
I'm drowning in mists of fiery green
The waters scream, the rain lace down
As I walk towards the farthest edge of town
Once your best friend, the laughter we found
Dissolves in the sins of me holding out
Enter the dreams, this perennial hell
Thats tearing my soul, and beating me down
Jade my heart for all time to see
A musical throbbing engulfing me
Forget a thought, that must never be
Your happy with her, as anyone can see
I pray for your happiness, a story of doves
Though subconsciously obscure, I am forever in love -
After seeing in her eyes the love that I know
The reason inside I introduced them so
i introduced them as well. i love it..very emotional and well writen
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