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Voices

The words started to come
The voices started to scream
There was no way to shut them out
No way to heal the doubt
I layed down a paper and pen
I tried my best so you would read
and would forgive
What I was doing felt wrong
But the voices said it was right
Hot water ran into the tub
I layed down and let the heat consume me
I pulled out the familiar blade
A scarlet line of symmetry straight through the crossed roads
Right down the street
I started to get weak
I cried one last time
Hoping you wont hate me for releasing my soul
I'm about to drift away
The water is an ocean of blood
Then the door slams open
I'm tugged out of my death
Familiar arms wrap me in a towel
You hold my face up to familiar eyes
You ask "Why?"
And I can't even speak
My mind is lost
My eyes are flooded
I fall into your arms and let you save me
Your kisses wake me from my trance
The spell that controlled my life
You slay all my voices
Silence them ceaslessly
You heal my scars and wounds
Internal and external pain
You love me for me
Voices and detestation lost
Love and sweet whispers gained
You are my love you are my heart
You are my life's revolution hero

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  • i.love.you.baby
    July 3

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    Wow... Such powerful words thrown together to create a beautiful piece... Well done. I thoroughly enjoyed this one. Thanks for entering and good luck.

  • dazedXdesires
    June 18

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    wONDERFULLY done.
    I was placed there watching it happen...

    I have actually been in this position
    lol


  • Sound of Madness
    June 15
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    Very captivating work.

  • Walls-within
    June 14
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    Wow I love this poem. It was a really good right, and it puts you there. The emotion...captivating.

  • completely mad
    June 12
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    this is a beautiful piece...I am glad you entered it in the contest...

  • HiddenByTheDark
    June 11

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    Wow!!!

    good job... i feel and see real raw emotion that's hard to see in many people.. and most of all i can relate to the feeling of when everything is so wrong and you just want the pain to go away...
    ♥always Katie


  • black-tears
    June 11

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    sweeeeeeeet

    this is sooo lovely
    you have the suicide thing in it, and the love thing too
    it's beautiful, really
    keep on the good work

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