So…
You’ve come for me?
Is it that time already?
It seems too soon, too soon.
It seems like just yesterday,
He and I frolicked on the Boulevard.
And now you say it’s time…
I see you…[collected]
Him as well, didn’t you?
How can that be?
What did you promise him?
The same thing as me?
May I take him from the tree,
And cup him in my hands,
Just to warm him a little?
While I wonder…
What you promised him.
Why, it must be the same,
As you promised me.
Foolish souls of no faith,
If only we had dared, we
Wouldn’t have needed you.
So…
You’ve come for me.
Author notes
I could have gone on and on [coulda, shoulda, woulda] with this one, I fell so in love with the pic. But, our fair mistress Jcat wanted it kept short...
art credit: http://morteque.deviantart.com/art/Burden-Of-Grief-84304314
A contest entry
- Blow My Mind.......PIC INSPIRED by jcat.
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this is very good in a chilling way
Riftkin
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I wonder if this is what people say when the reaper appears? Do they wonder if it is really time, or do they plead for more? Chilling take and very appropriate to the picture.
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Why, it must be the same,
As you promised me.
Foolish souls of no faith,
If only we had dared, we
Wouldn’t have needed you.
A very powerful stanza!!! So much truth held here!! If only we had more faith.....excellent!!! I thank you for entering my contest -
In the end it is never the things we did that we regret but rather the things we didn't do...
"If only we had dared, we
Wouldn’t have needed you."
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DARK
Great wording for those of no faith. I also see the crow in the background. I'm sure had you expanded this verse, it would have taken readers to a darker place, and perhaps had her begging for mercy???? NO? Hard to write with so few words. You did it Babe! YES! You're still my babe! Best wishes.
Linda
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Thank you so much for your kind comment, I am not worthy.
Here's looking at you, kid.
Brazos
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You have done a great job with this picture prompt. This feels very,very eerie and it gave me chills. I can see how you feel you could have gone on more with this, but I really like what you have done here. Nice write! Blessings, Patty
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What a dark eerie take on the picture you have written, and am loving it. He, It are whatever will surely come to claim their property. You have tweaked my imagery with this one.....excellent.writing
Cowamooch novy
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