I love your eyes, I crave your smile
When you look at me, I melt for a while.
You don't know how you make me feel.
My heart it flutters, I can't believe your real.
Your perfect body and perfect mind,
Keeps me thinking how you could date my kind.
I must be lucky, it can't be true.
You'll never know how much I love you.
I'm so stupid, I made a mistake.
Why did I ever ask for a break.
I miss your eyes, I crave you smile.
When I think of you I cry for a while.
Your perfect body and amazing mind,
Keeps me thinking how you could date my kind.
I must of been lucky, it can't be true.
Why did I ever break up with you....
A contest entry
- Will you remember me? by SomethingPoetic.
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Thank you for your beautiful entry,I can very much relate to this one and heartbreakingly so, good luck in my contest, Josie
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who is this about? Just curious...
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Pretty much you...
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Wow this was very good. The way it tied in with the end was awesome. Thanks you so much for entering!
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Your flow and rhye are very good, I enjoyed this poem, and I especially love how the tone of the poem changes at midway....very creative!
Thanks for sharing this,
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Very nice.
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breaking up is hard. Especially when you really love the person.
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Aw. That was sad, yet wonderful.
The rhyming had a good beat to it.
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oh! it makes me wanna cry! i went through the same thing. i'm an emo in love with a prep and it will never happen so i can really relate to line 6.
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AMAZING I LOVED IT
This is really really good! I love how you wrote it! First it was happy then it got sad because you wanted to take a break! You must have really loved them!!! Keep it up because you are very good at writing love it!!!!
~*~Jamie~*~
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This is a really beautiful poem, but rather sad as well.
You did a fantastic job in writing this though. The rhyming is good, as is the structure. This was a very nice poem.
If it's true, I hope you get back together, because you obviously really love them.
xox
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