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Caught Up in the Moment

Caught up in the moment
Wondering what will be
Building bridges over chasms
To watch them crash into eternity

Caught without rhyme or reason
Sending messages in the rain
Posting dreams in letters written
In misty breath on window panes

Looking out for new horizons
Counting down the times we pursued
Hoping for a new beginning
With this love we once knew

While our hearts tremble here together
And your smile covers all our dreams
They are all a small reminder
Of these moments love can bring

So remember me in passing
I will stay here for a while
And linger while you're sleeping
In the warmth of your secret smile 
 
Here I'll be while you are waking
Sending messages in the rain
Posting dreams in letters written
In misty breath on window panes...

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  • closetpoet99
    October 15

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    wow the imagery was vivid and so easy to relate to and explanatory and sweet. the flow was nice and it was enjoyable to read, but the imagery is brilliant........ wow.... just wow


  • PurpleSky
    October 7

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    holy crap has this been in alot of contest lol anyways for the write it was well written and a joy to read. thanks for entering and good luck to you
    huggles
    Lena


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    September 16

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    beautifully worded with some beautiful images to capture the peots mind within the life of this poem. you have displayed those droplets of what makes love so perfect extremly beautifully and I can relate to it myself. well done and thank you for entering

    char
    xxx


  • Diminished Capacity gold member
    July 14

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    This write is so beautiful.
    My favorite part-
    Here I'll be while you are waking
    Sending messages in the rain
    Posting dreams in letters written
    In misty breath on window panes...

    Thank you so much for this wonderful entry.


  • nobodys-girl
    July 2

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    oh so beautiful! the picture you painted is just amazing. thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck!


  • ladybug.
    June 23

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    Stunning ^^ So simply done, so rich. My favourite stanza was

    "So remember me in passing
    I will stay here for a while
    And linger while you're sleeping
    In the warmth of your secret smile "

    I feel the words being said aloud. Thanks for sharing!


  • LostinLove399
    June 4

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    very good poem you really painted a picture here with this peice and exactly what tyou wanted it to say and it flowed beautifully throughout the poem and I look forward to reading more of your amazing work so Best of luck in this contest


  • TwiztidMaggot
    May 5

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    This is very well worded! I like how you wrote it. it blew me away completely! Keep up your amazing work!

    CrimsonViper


  • ChunkyC
    December 10, 2008

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    Aww.. I really like this. The whole "letters in window panes" idea is so vivid and pretty... I love it.. And the

    And linger while you're sleeping
    In the warmth of your secret smile

    ...Tears my heart apart.. I love those lines..

    Great write.. Thank you. Good luck.


  • MisJudged
    December 10, 2008

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    Such a beautiful poem. Love is the best form of poetry. I could picture the scene so well, and truthfully it made my heart ache. I only wish I could experience something so pure.

  • poets whisper silver member
    November 10, 2008

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    Posting dreams in letters written
    In misty breath on window panes... such a picturesque phrase. It is filled with both love and sadness. the breath on the window pane I can see in my mind. good jb thank you for entering


  • ProudMomma
    October 17, 2008
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    good write


  • fairytalelovestory
    October 15, 2008
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    ty and gl


  • Jade.Butterfly gold member
    October 1, 2008

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    Ah so calming, yet so sweet.
    Made me smile
    Such a wonderful write.
    Made me feel like i was drifting away ..
    nicely done.
    good luck in contest.
    -Mandi

  • ichigosama
    July 15, 2008

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    ichigosama

    it's so mystical like. it also really has this rainy day feel when there's like nothing to do and you write in your diary. i absolutely love the part. . . in misty breath or window panes. i like it. good job and thanks for entering!!!!!!


  • Mary Jane.
    June 22, 2008

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    Wow... I really like this... Especially:
    Sending messages in the rain
    Posting dreams in letters written
    In misty breath on window panes
    Its something I think we all have done, and it brings back some good memories for me and not so good ones.
    Thanks for entering and good luck.
    Sarah


  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    June 21, 2008

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    Thank you for your lovely entry, good luck in my contest, Josie


  • Sweet Sorrow
    June 20, 2008
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    Awesome piece and done in excellent taste....the message embrace sweetness. Thank you for sharing


  • MissPennyLane
    June 20, 2008

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    I really adore this piece, the message is very sweet, and it's beautifully written thanks for your entry!


  • KayJay
    June 19, 2008

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    Wonderful write... it has beauty and a tenderness that's so full of emotion. Well deserving of the gold! Best of luck...
    Ken


  • Thoughts-of-Soloman
    June 17, 2008

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    Nice write Myriad... love the misty breath part!!

    Congratulations on the 'Gold"

    Sol

  • Fitz1901
    June 13, 2008

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    I Really loved this poem . First off its has such a gentle and loving quality to it. and its dang good poetry, its smooth, has a good rhyme to it, original descriptions, a great ending...etc.

    Fantastic Job

    thanks for entering


  • waydownuponjoy
    June 11, 2008

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    How perfectly sweet!

    I am always elated to find your 'sweeter or is it lighter?' side in verse as there can be no stronger force than the 'power of love'. This is a great entry from you and written in good poetical form! I so appreciate the metaphor of the following lines: "Posting dreams in letters written ~ In misty breath on window panes" You DO have a softer side that shows through your eyes! joy


  • PoetrysAngel2041
    June 11, 2008

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    Great work

    This piece flowed well and was nicely written. You've done a great job with this topic. My favorite part was the last stanza, the idea of eternal happiness and being in their dreams and thoughts all the time. Nicely done!

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