hear the soldiers screaming
the missles dancing over head
hear the bullets laughing
the people filled up with lead
with men falling by the dozens
what do you tell the fathers and mothers
the sisters and the brothers?
when they come home in a body bag
and have to be identified by a tag?
A contest entry
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You have such a wonderful start here! the rhyme scheme is amazing and touching.. If I were you I would write more and go on with it! don't be afraid of length!
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very heartfelt and powerful!
is war ever the answer...the question we struggle with
for all of humanity!
ears/Seattle very powerful and heartfelt poem you
wrote. well done!
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WOW!!! I'm not sure who you are but I loved your poem and I also hate war so I would really love to have you as part of my AP family
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Power!!
hear the bullets laughing
that right there is an amazing line.
it just shows the cruel, merciless nature
of war. i couldnt have captured it better
if i tried, this is amazing!!
Keep writing!!!
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Nice job.
See, this one i like alot.
Good Job.
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good for you...to use your poetic voice
to reach out for those who wear the tag of war
swallowed whole by its brutal affects.
good job...good job!
ears/Seattle
may we find a way as Americans to bring our brothers
and sisters home safely..and not ever forget the
sacrifice they gave!
ears/Seattle
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OMg you made me cry, you know that my husband is in the army and this is really emotional i like the deep thoughts you have put into this poem, and i love the feelings you have expressed, thank you for sharing your feelings and keep up the wonderful writing, ~Amy
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omg thats horrible ....
thanks for the comment it meens alot
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awsome
im like in aww riite now even tho its short it to the poin tyou were tryin to make u kno
u r awsome
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to love war is to be brutal... I hate war myself. It just doesn't make any sense... but your poem here makes a lot of sense.
blessed be
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crap i put the wrong their its supposed to be they are
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I love this...I adore the simple honesty of the title. I hate war too. I have loved ones who are there tonight. I truly appreciate your entry and I will be by to read more of you very soon!!!
Blessed Be~
Az
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