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Burnt

I’d love to show you
battle scars and hybrids,
memories of lover’s past

But something electric
transpired in your eyes
confirming the inevitible

Now it ticks in unison
manic like a toaster dial
rushed to completion

Gageing our whereabouts
in syncronized featherings
of tender erections

Delivering evidence
of undenied affections
pooled in cotton lining

Still we mesh our souls,
transmissions clearly wired
to unclaimed ties

Virtual moments, crumbs
soiled to perfection
avoiding society’s minds


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For "E", just a memory of years gone by.

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  • leander Moderators member
    October 25, 2008

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    Here I go speechless...

    You're the first one who managed to shut my face in this contest...

    crap me!


  • peregrin
    September 23, 2008
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    ...
    This is great...
    what a powerful story being told.
    Great!


  • Talia
    June 18, 2008
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    Oooooo eeer you little minx. sometimes its just nice to be taken back


  • cherche -d -ame
    June 16, 2008

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    you took this to a depth of this fan of yours.....to relish in your words and ponder whatever or whomever comes to mind [one layer at a time].Super job my friend!
    much love
    xoxoxoxo
    reenie


  • individuality gold member
    June 15, 2008

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    i have never looked at a toaster dial as manic, mind you i have not had a toaster for ages, i use matches lol - good descriptive language that slides along yesteryear.


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    June 15, 2008

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    You have created the honest status of the relationships irrespective of the truths of this so called life..just wonderful catch you did my friend....


  • queen Moderators member
    June 12, 2008

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    Ooo laaaa laaa sometimes those memories sustain us Excellent poem


  • suseann
    June 11, 2008

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    Ahh....,why do I feel like I openned a door and barged in on a private encounter? Ops! Excuse please.I'll quickly comment and dart out with my head down,eyes averted to the floor. Ha! Got ya! Depth shows in verse on topic of a realm filled with considered emotions.Passions show as well as the full spectrum of love experienced in weighing ups and downs of romance.Nice work.


  • Frozentearz
    June 11, 2008

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    Love muddy's comment
    It just proves just how deep your writes are and how you make us all ponder within them.
    Feeling this as always
    warm thoughts.
    Shey


  • Kari gold member
    June 11, 2008

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    Love is such a battlefield of emotions. It's a rollarcoaster ride. One minute you're up high, the next you're down low wondering what to do.
    We wonder what should have been said and want to go back in time again, but can't. All we can do is hang on to those ties that bind, and see what happens tomorrow.
    Best of luck with everything


  • MuddyKing
    June 10, 2008
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    I'll be back...you keep doing this to me...lol

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