as I round the corner,
anticipation races
in my chest
with the thought...
I may capture
your crystal eyes
burning
like an amber leaf
that falls gently
like your words
it kindly lets go
and surrenders
to the winds of vulnerability
Author notes
Please pen me beauty in 40 words or less...
WE LOVE OUR CRAZYMAMMA!!
This is in memory of the time I had a crush on this guy, that has now been my boyfriend for about 4 years Living together for 2 years and still going strong.
In a list
A contest entry
- Give me Beauty.... semi-quickie... by kiwigirljacks.
600 points, ended June 11, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Sappy love poems by crazymomma.
800 points, ended July 27, 68 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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You have wonderful imagery and this just rolled off the tongue with ease. My favorite lines were:
"burning
like an amber leaf
that falls gently
like your words"
Thanks for entering and good luck -
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Thank you...this poem means a lot to me because this describes my feelings (crush) the first time I met the guy I have been with for 4 years now. ..glad you like it
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Very good write. I like the way this poem looks.
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This is warmly beautiful, so heartfelt and it shows. Glad the true inspiration is still inspiring. Congratulations on the gold. This is pure beauty.
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That is beauty.
Congrats on the gold.
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Lovely take on the prompt. Very sweet and the last line is just beautiful. Good luck in the contest.
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Ohhh such a beautiful sweeping poem of love's awakening.. the anticipation, the vulnerability and the sheer beauty of such an emotion... wonderful write!
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Wow...thanx for the gold...very much appreciated...I was running against some really talented and tough competitors...I almost can't believe I won anything
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Well deserved! This was so beautiful and full of tender emotion!
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Beautifully Done
What a beautiful poem. There is beauty written all over it and I loved it. Best of luck to you in the contest.
Many Blessings
Kelle Marie
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It's amazing now without the tweaks being done
For someone who doesn't write about love, you've done it well ^^
Good luck with your entry!
Claire xx
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Another voice (LOL) Beauty is everywhere and the diverse responses to Jackie's prompt verifies that. Well done and best of luck...
Ken
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LOL...I havent' read the other prompts yet...i am still tweaking...I haven't even come up with a title yet...lol. but thank you kindly...and best of luck to you too...I can't wait to read the other entries!!!
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