Evening falls
So slowly,
Rolling shadows streaming black,
No escape inside her chrysalis,
No thoughts of turning back.
Fear falls,
He grows
Determined pulsing like the tide
As he slips into her chamber
And invites himself inside.
Silence.
His breath
Hot on her neck like flowing flames.
Once this cast out fallen spirit
Felt the heat within her veins.
Struggling.
No struggle left.
Release of consciousness she bends
her will, no longer hers,
surrendered, shattered, he spends.
Minutes trail,
Now hours,
leaving as dawn pervades the night
Consumed in a sunlit soliloquy
Her broken wings take flight.
She is free.
Author notes
they say when you're drowning you still have a chance until you stop swimming, sometimes things happen in your life you couldn't stop no matter how hard you tried and you get lost inside yourself trying to separate yourself from the reality. i guess the point is don't stop swimming, all experiences even the darkest most painful ones go into making us who we are and we can never give up fighting to keep who we are alive and growing in spite of abusers.
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yah, well its like you said, it all makes us who we are (._.)
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Yea, but keep your head up and be proud of who you are today.
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Sometimes the best "revenge" is learning how to live again, to heal, and to forgive. Though forgiving does not necessarily mean either forgetting or condoning.
I begin to understand how you achieved as much maturity as you possess, at your (one could wish it were still tender) age. I hear ya, Sister. One in six, is it now (girls who are sexually molested before adulthood)?
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1 in 5, before 15, and that's reported ones, it's probably more like 1 in 3 as soon as you realize it wasn't your fault it's easier to come to terms with dealing with it and realizing it was a sick person who probably got abused themselves and is channeling the abuse probably in their way to understand it. eventually you stop the revenge plotting in your head but it doesnt make it go away but its better then not knowing so you can continue to live, i totally agree. for a while i didnt want to live or not live as me, i felt like i was less of a person after and more like of this little thing that had no choice but i got past that probably faster then alot of people because i had alot of responsibility thrown on me and had that to concentrate on. i call that my time of choosing, it was the time i was either gonna rise and survive or crumble and lose it because i couldnt have handled one more thing on me, for a while i wasnt being good to myself or even acknowledging myself, i separated me from me and just like looked in from the outside for a while while i taught myself how to cook so we didnt have to eat take out every night and tried to take care of everything else, i was like a robot. its almost 8 years ago. still the anniversary is coming up and you never forget that day, just deal more each year i guess
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Dang. Looks like things have gotten worse?
When I was younger (around the early/mid 1980's, I think) the official statistics were 1 in 6 by age 18. Unofficial was 1 in 4 or 1 in 3. I wonder if this means that more abuse is occurring. Could it possibly indicate more reporting? That would be good news.
Dang, girl, your personal story! I heard this: "i call that my time of choosing, it was the time i was either gonna rise and survive or crumble and lose it". I've had several of those in my life. I think these pivot periods are opportunities (for most of us, I hope). I want to write a piece (and/or run a contest) on my re-write of a saying:
"What doesn't kill you makes you stronger." Blech! Let's try:
"What doesn't kill you:
(a) makes you want to run away from it if you can
(b) stimulates you to face, and hopefully overcome, the challenge(s)
(c) irretrievably breaks your psyche
(d) maims you horribly and leaves you crippled for life
(e) any combination of the above, in any order.
Sometimes those conveniently shortened (to the point of inaccuracy) pollyanna sayings get on my nerves. Grrrrr.
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This is really good. I like it a lot. Thank you for entering.
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this is really well written..can feel the pain for sure. really liked your author notes as well, it's very true...have to keep swimming..
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So Poignant...
and sad! Oh...this is detailed with such emotion, pain, & vividness! It would appear that this is a tale from experience & I'm so sorry you had to suffer through this! I can only say that I understand & with time & realizing that the perpetrators of this crime are usually those who've been victimized themselves or are mentally imbalanced we can forgive & move on! I'm glad to see you won a trophy for having the courage to write about this, you deserve it. Be brave young one & don't believe for one moment that you're to blame! I know only too well the feelings & anxiety that accompany this kind of cruelty, but time & knowledge heals!
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WOW - Poetically from the heart. -- This brings a tear to my ear. Send the rest in private message, I'm sorry I can't post.
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Well written! This shows some real insight on your oart Liz! Great job!
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unfortunate.
that's the first word i think of when i think of this topic because i try to avoid how painfully real it is. i don't know if you personally have felt this way, i'm assuming so.... but I too have had such an experience... i bear the scar on my left arm from it. i was 11. everyone has their individual way of dealing-- for me, it was to keep the knife... it sits beside me now on my night stand and it serves as a reminder that because of it, i am who i am; i feel how i feel; i am strong because i dealt with its unfortunate sting.
if this poem described your personal situation, then i sincerely bid you my best wishes of peace.
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Wow. That was good.It was deep. Good luck on the contest.
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great poem loved it good luck
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A very good poem. Very surprising write, and it floed so nicely. The emotion was easily relatable. Good luck in this contest.
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This struck me, took the breathe from my lips as I read it. It was haunting. The way you captured the defeat in such a subtle way. It was well written. I am kinda speechless, overcome with emotion. Its rare that I feel what I am reading and you accomplished that here. Well done.
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*sigh* Wow.
Very haunting words here. Abuse of any kind, especially rape, is a very difficult subject to discuss. Very painful story told here. Good work.
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This is a powerful write and very well written. I am so sorry this was your experience, and my heart breaks for you. Nobody should ever have to endure this kind of horror and pain. Keep writing as it can be so healing. I wish you all the best. Blessings, Patty
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It rhymes well, even when you strayed a bit it still worked. I like the archaic tone in this. I thought it was a vampire poem before the author note. I'm gald it wasn't.
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