What you see is not me.
I am the glass pyramid
You think you can see through
Until the light comes from another angle
And you realize that you can't
That there are so many colors, colors
You've never seen or heard of before
In this tiny glass pyramid
You once thought was so clear
I am the peacock
With feathers hidden and folded
That you think is just an old bird
Before it ruffles its majestic quills
And you see the magnificent menagerie
Of greens, blues, and radiant violets
Hovered above this ordinary peacock
You once thought was just simple
I am the cloud
You think is wispy and light
But the next moment it is thundering
Towering over you and roaring the rain
And you see that it is not always light
That it can transform with a puff of wind
Into shades from silver to blue
All in this forever-changing cloud
You once thought was only benign
One second I am happy
Two seconds I am sad
Three seconds I am gone.
What you see is not me.
Author notes
Option 3: Describe how you are not who people make you out to be.
Quote:
"No one means me
When they say people don't grow
The face in the mirror is not me"
-Frusciante
"The Mirror"
I actually wrote this during class, so this is technically a prewrite. But I thought it had enough to do with the prompt, so I'm giving it a try ^.^
The mood here is supposed to be sort of apologetic and somber...because a lot of people like me for who I'm not.
A contest entry
- Quote inspired prompt - The Mirror by sassykitty.
400 points, ended June 21, 2008, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - People under 14--Be Deep! by myusikah.
450 points, ended June 30, 2008, 15 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - OptionsOptionsPleaseEnter [PW] by stargazer..
800 points, ended July 20, 2008, 18 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I need to read something GOOD. by AutumnsFlame.
800 points, ended September 1, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
1 - 8 of 8
-
WOW, Great work here, and being only 14 years old, you most certainly did an excellent job. This had some beautiful imagery. Thank you for entering my contest.
-
You have an amazing talent and beautiful choice of words & I like how you describe what they thought then what happens.I can't pick a favortite line because i loved it from beginning to end.
-
Wow! This is so powerful! I especially love the last two stanzas, so brilliant! Nice word choice too, especially:
benign, majestic, menajerie,wispy
I wish you luck in the contests you've entered, you definitely deserve a trophy.
-
If I had control of this contest instead of myu,
This'd be an AUTOMATIC WIN. *____*
-
This is beautiful! I love this, very deep. A good vent of feelings. I like the vocabulary in this one. Yes, people certainly are misleading. You think someone's one person, but in truth they really are another. I love this. Thank you for sharing! good luck!
-->pia♫♪
-
this is a great write - well done! I'd be really interested to see how it changes if you do decide to redraft/edit it at all. I particularly like the personfication and imagery relating to clouds, it really creates a tone and balance. You've used a difficult quote to contextualise effectively and the mood reads well. Huge thanks for entering the competition and I do wish you the best of luck. Cheers.
-
Hmmm... interesting. Makes you think for a while. Anyone specific this towards?
-
-
Practically everyone is surprised at who am...so it's directed to anyone really. Thanks for the comment
-
Adding your comment:
1 - 8 of 8
