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Abandoned

 

 It feels cold in here
I can't feel your warmth
Like I could before
What's wrong with me?
God, have you left me
Or have I left you?
Don't answer that question
I don't think I wanna know
I can't get past this
Feeling like I've been abandoned
Like I've been left behind
I've shutdown because of my fear
But you've told me "Child, I'm still here"
Is it really supposed to be this way?
When will people really pray
For the light to open up my eyes
And the darkness to drift away?
I feel abandoned
Left behind
Is it you or is it me?
You told me you'll always love me
So then Lord, what must I change?
To quit feeling this way
Like it's always about to rain
Show me where Your light is
So I can call upon Your name
And feel free

 

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  • wwfhrocks14
    February 22

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    wow, this poem is so deep. it captures so many of my feelings on God, religion all the like. Sometimes I think he left me... but then again i may have left him, and like i'm your poem, it's not so much i don't want that question answered, im scared i think. really deep... great write...


  • movedon
    July 24, 2008

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    Very strong emotions that you spoke of here my friend. Shame you won nothing in the contests. It was deserving of at least an HM.

    Warmest,

    Mylee


  • Mountainwhispers
    June 20, 2008

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    This is so beautiful true feelings expressed thats what I liked and the rythem went along so nicely Great job!!
    ~Ocean~


  • Shya
    June 14, 2008

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    I love the voice of this poem! I can feel every emotion, the lost and desolate tone, and the questions. "God, have you left me or have I left you?" This is a poem not overly-religious like other poems about God, and one that I'm sure many can relate to. Good write! Thanks for entering my contest!


  • tortured-heart
    June 11, 2008
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    reading my mind again?
    peace, love, & cheese


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    June 10, 2008

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    I really can relate to this one in many respects. Although I'm not really strong on religion, I do believe in God and do feel sometimes abandoned by him and by people in general. I guess sometimes it's hard to see that maybe we are expecting too much of the people or divinity around us.

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