It swims through the air,
earthen colours tip toeing through the trees,
patterned like a Persian rug
it sways with the breeze
Our love is a butterfly
You are the flight and I am the song
I am the wings and you are the voice
Your words in my veins pulse deeper than lust
My love in your smile shines brighter than stars
Our love is a butterfly
It lands
welcomed by the flower’s petals,
it is happy.
Cooled by the breeze, warmed by the sun
It sleeps in calm perfection
Our love is a butterfly
It ages, each flutter more and more difficult
Striving for each breath,
it’s eyes close.
Our love is a butterfly
It falls from the sky
Our love is a butterfly
It lands, dainty wings crumpling
patterns and colours stained and broken
it is bullied by the wind
Our love is a butterfly
Our song grows darker, the flight is over
Your words leak from my heart
My love in your smile drained from your eyes
Our love is a butterfly
Your blood on my hands, it’s the end of the song
Four hearts, one each broken in the other.
We stand broken
A cocoon hatches.
Our love was a butterfly.
Author notes
Meh, I dunno. This is how I saw the dream, when I remembered it.
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Very good write.
"Our love is a butterfly", is surely good metaphor.
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portraying such a dream, is very hard (on my part) since I tend to tell those verbally rather than writing it...
This one is good, I like the repetition, it made the flow much better!!!
Our love is a butterfly - an excellent metaphor
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its us !
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Uhm, no.
Don't assume all my poetry is about you.
I don't think any of it is.
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your a bum
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That's some kind of love.
The metaphor "our love is a butterfly" was great, just like this piece. -
Great..
I love the way you describe your love. Its worded so well and so very well written. I like the fact how you relate you love with a butterfly. my favorite part is when you said "You are the flight and I am the song
I am the wings and you are the voice Your words in my veins pulse deeper than lust My love in your smile shines brighter than stars" i loved how you said that part it actully made me jump out of my seat.
thanks for entering my contest i wish you the best of luck.
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awsome
its cool how u conpared your rulaishenship with a butterfly -
this is a very good piece... i like it a lot
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Far more similar to an ear lobe!
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That is pretty. I really liked that!
Love is a butterfly. Freely soaring. But sometimes, it only lasts a few weeks. And then, it's gone. Good luck!
-->pia♫♪
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