As I open the window
A warm summer breeze greats me
Sending in a burst of beauty and wonder.
Honeysuckle lingers in the air
So sweet, I can taste it.
I embrace the breeze’s rhythmic dance
As it swirls about my face
Gliding gently with grace
Among the honeysuckle bush.
I breathe in the warmth,
The salty air as I gaze at the fading sky.
I cling onto its golden hue
Not wanting it to get away from me
The sea blushes beneath me,
As I appraise its beauty.
Its rosy color reflecting the setting sun
Sparkling softly, and singing quietly
With the playful breeze.
The birds soon join in with the festivities
Waltzing with the graceful wind
Praising the world in all its splendor
All its beauty.
I close my eyes and take it all in
This breathtaking sight that’s laid before me.
I open my eyes to find the birds
Following the setting sun,
As the sea blushes at me
This perfect moment etched in my mind forever
As the wind still calls my name.
Author notes
Prompt:
28 is a great number! glad you picked it becasue I have a great scene for you to paint with your creatve words.
right now forget that I am on the compouter but seconds ago i opened the window wide and stuck my head out of the window. the birds are twittering the sun is setting and the sea has turned pink but the mosant thing that i want you to emphasise is the breeze its gentle and perfect it is perfumed with honey suckle that is growing under my window smells great hoe he air should smell all the time in my opinion. so give me that scene add to your poem a description of everything i see reflected in my eyes and my thoughts hat am i thinking guess?
have fun here are your promptsto help you.
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A contest entry
- 1 Week left to write your best write ever! by Folklor.
1050 points, ended June 23, 33 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wow, great imagery ! I loved everything about it. It was so unique & well written. You wrote such a breathtaking poem, full of creative metaphors and basically everything a poem needs =]
-I breathe in the warmth,
The salty air as I gaze at the fading sky.
I cling onto its golden hue
Not wanting it to get away from me
The sea blushes beneath me,
As I appraise its beauty.
Its rosy color reflecting the setting sun
Sparkling softly, and singing quietly
With the playful breeze.
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That was probably my favorite. It's almost like it has all of the five senses in that one stanza. Wow. Definitely well written. I can see why you won silver :] Keep it up! ♥
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Wow, that was beautifully written. You have a wonderful way of capturing a vision through words. Nice write indeed!
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Beautiful Poem
The way that you express the physical side of nature with the your senses is great. I felt like I could actually smell the honeysuckle in the air. Great visualization also. The scenery just flowed with the words.
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You are one with nature.
'festivities','Waltzing'. Why then these two words. They spoil the entire poem offend my thoughts.
Grace your poem with beauty of nature.
See the mind blowing effect.
For me a perfect playing with words.
Got to click you as a friend so I get to see your work.
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awwwww this is so pretty and wonderful, congrats on silver and take care
stephanie
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WOW WOW
You painted a beautiful portrait of the prompts Folklor gave you, I have never 'seen' the wind , until I read this, well done! You have brought such beauty from a scene into the mind with your words, If the blind were to hear this, they would SEE this. BRAVO! I so loved these descriptive lines: The breeze's rhyhmic dance; Gliding gently with grace; the sea blushes beneath me; the birds waltzing with the graceful wind...and following the sunset; as the wind still calls my name. Just lovely. Good luck in Folklor's contest !!!
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AMAZEING
I was right there Machaela
looking out that window...feeling the breeze..
absolutly AMAZEING.....
TREV X X X
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Awesome Write!
This has to be your best! What a mature poet you have become..The imagery, the flow and beauty of this write...It is so gentle and calming....."As the sea blushes at me, This perfect moment etched in my mind forever as the wind still calls my name" Bravo! this should take the gold!
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This is almost bursting with imagery sweetie. I just loved it. Good luck in the contest. It looks like a winner to me.
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28 is a great number! glad you picked it
becasue I have a great scene for you to paint with your creatve words.
right now forget that I am on the compouter but seconds ago i opened the window wide and stuck my head out of the window. the birds are twittering the sun is setting and the sea has turned pink but the mosant thing that i want you to emphasise is the breeze its gentle and perfect it is perfumed with honey suckle that is growing under my window smells great hoe he air should smell all the time in my opinion. so give me that scene add to your poem a description of everything i see reflected in my eyes and my thoughts hat am i thinking guess?
have fun here are your promptsto help you.
http://robsellen.com/uploaded_images/PICT0001-770190.JPG
http://robsellen.com/uploaded_images/PICT0011-744679.JPG
http://www.simplyscene.com/review/wp-content/plugins/hot-linked-image-cacher/upload/farm1.static.flickr.com/198/486476524_2d33db1912_m.jpg
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