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Coal and Rust



sadists wail in pleasure at love's derision
smeared in coal a surrealistic vision
harshly shake with unregulated wanting
tragic and haunting

weary lover trapped in a lost illusion
fights a war of menacing dark collusion
tries to find the chink in love's rusty armor
where they can harm her

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Just a feeling I wanted to write down

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  • Rianna Bear
    June 11

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    a feeling, hmm? trying to figure out the coal and rust...thinking hard, but haven't placed it just yet. coal, i think of dark and chalky...easily smerared. rust, something of corrosion over time... lemme see. well, there's definitely some darkness in it.

    ♥rianna


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    June 11

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    I'm fascinated to know where this came from!!

    I do love the thought behind it!


  • Amera gold member
    June 10

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    This is about Passions? Do you two have something going on that I'm not aware of? I like the tone and flow here, it's structured like a Sapphic Ode.

    Love,
    Amera♥


    • PerVirtuous Allan gold member
      June 15
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      It is an actual sapphic ode, not one of those fake ones that's been bastardized.

    • PassionsPromise gold member
      June 15
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      And Amera,
      (dont tell Allan, but every time i think about him and I....well....you know....I start screaming out in tongues, and I am immediately saved...Im waiting for a goddess, who knows who she is...can you tell her to hurry and find me...)

      Love ya
      Passions

    • PerVirtuous Allan gold member
      June 11
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      If so, I don't know anything about it either.

  • PassionsPromise gold member
    June 10

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    Oh so now you want to talk about me huh???
    Well damn it was just a comment in the last one but I dont much care for this///no sir s okay i do but damnit stop talking about me...I am a woman who can handle it, dont need know armor to protect me...(damn where did i put that Good Book? )

    Love it and you
    Passions

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