Is it worth it?
I ponder with doubt
My bodys shaking
all throughout
I thought I'd left but
I just return
It's soft feeling makes
my life slow-churned
I find my rush
and soon I'm there
You're face is gone
hidden nowhere
Inside goes the mix
and I forget all
You won't be
there to catch my fall
I said it was over
I said I'm through
And all the while
I've thought of you
And our baby
full of life
Gone with this needle
Not a knife
And now he's gone
And you'll leave too
So my potion of "happyness"
won't hurt you
Atleast it's over
through and through
This baby's last breath
will be mine, too
A contest entry
- Love,Depression,Sorrow, by XxunBeautifulxX.
300 points, ended June 24, 2008, 23 entries
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Comments
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the rhyming in this is good. there are a few typos that i noticed but nothing tragic. i thank you for sharing this well written poem with me tonight and i am looking forward to reading more from you in the very near future. i wish you the best of luck in this contest that you have entered. viyanna rosemarie
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this is kind of depressing.... i hate suiside poetry. Its very flowy. good job. and good luck in the contest.
~Kat *♥*
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Yeah I'm not really into suicide poetry either but I always experiment with new thiings.
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great poem
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I like the poem...but i am having a hard time understanding...Is this poem about drugs and abortion...that is what I getting please if I have it wrong tell me
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It's about a pregnant woman with an addiction who quit when she got pregnant but can't stay off it and so when she finally does it she kills the baby and knowing she can't live without him she overdoses. Yeah that's one hell of a runon sentance
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This is really good.
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