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The Truth About Animal Farm : Corrected

The Truth At Animal Farm
Over the road stands animal farm,
They don't treat each other at all with harm,
Where animals are friendly, they’re kind, they care,

They harvest their food and equally share.
They truly believe all animals are great,
However that could be a cause for debate,
For I have heard rumours which say they're all lies,
For some of them have come to see with their eyes,
The truth that lies behind the fences,
That there seems to be a shortage of expenses!

The pigs it seems offer no respect,
They have been treating the farm with neglect,
Snowball their leader was kicked out of the joint,
The farm was great until they decide to appoint,
Napoleon as leader, the dogs as his guards,
And all of the time they choose to discard
the animals, faithful, apart from their dreams,
Napoleon thought they were in Snowballs team!

Many were killed when they confessed
alliance with snowball as they died at best!
Animals were tortured emitting piercing cries
of the terror of carrying on with their lives
under the reign of Napoleon the Great,
Of whom most of the animals nurtured supreme hate,

So here is the truth about animal farm,
Where deep in the halls comes great harm,
They are selfish and hostile and have no care,
There is no equality or desire to share. 

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