Pain, Darkness
All hell coming through
Trials, Losses
What's this world coming to
Hearts broken and shattered
No light coming in
Depression and sorrow
Covered in sin
Sadness and Burdens
A face full fo tears
All coming at me
They're all of my fears
They all surround me
They're the best of the worst
They drown me out
I hear them at first
Silence comes next
And it fills the air
I feel the rejection
I feel my heart tear
Emptiness overccomes me
Stoic is how I feel
My emotions all drained
This is so real
This is my reality
I can't break free
I'm the only one here
It's all up to me
I try once, then twice
And fail once again
Everything overcomes me
I'm hurt by my sin
I'm sick of trying
I just want to cry
I lay down and close my eyes
It's therethat I die
But now that I'm dead
Somehow I feel free
I won by losing
And now I can see
The hell that I put myself through
And the suicidal thoughts
They left me weak
They left me distraught
I didn't fight
I didn't win
I just gave up
And fell deeper in sin
Author notes
Idk, i was thinking of how a person would feel after they commited suicide and this is what I came up with
A contest entry
- Raw Emotion by loving.a.soldier.
600 points, ended June 27, 2008, 26 entries
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Comments
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Ah..you made me the speechless by the sentiments you shared with me here..very strongly you shared the pain..and made me a painful as well..
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Very good! I love the flow of this poem. And the rhyme scheme is really good! Great job on this piece. Good luck to you and thank you for entering!
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~Lynn Jones
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