This pain is immense, it’s killing me
I’m fading inside; your face I can’t see
You’re so far away; you’re so out of reach
From crying so much, I’m losing my speech
These nightmares grow, if you don’t come home
I’m afraid to be all alone
But I know it’s not true, this can’t be real
I know in my mind, this aching I feel
You love me so much, I know you would stay
But you had things to attend to that day
So I’ll wait here, knowing you’ll be…
Sitting alone thinking of me
A contest entry
- Raw Emotion by loving.a.soldier.
600 points, ended June 27, 2008, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
i miss him... 3 weeks alone... not to bad
Comments
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Corrections: in the 4th line..."from crying so much, I'm LOSING my speech"
Other than the correction that needs to be made. This poem really wasn't that bad. It was actually pretty good. Good luck to you and thank you for entering the contest!
The One and Only...
~Lynn Jones
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awww!!!
this is so cute!!! and its exactly how i feel right now! only it was me that had to leave but still im sitting here thinking about my boyfriend hoping hes thinking about me!! Amazing write and i love the rhyme scheme.
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