Melow Dramatic Princess
I'll lick the blood
From the knife you stabbed me with
Your highness
Our "love"
Filled with too many
Cyanide Covered Kisses
&& Heartfelt Good byes
After all of these years
Serving your toxic distaste
I've become ill with the thought of you
&& Yet this sickness,pulls me closer
All with such haste
I love when you stab me in the back
I adore my infected wounds
I yearn for those hateful words
I swoon for our disaster
Author notes
This is for the contest and the song is "Tainted Love" - Marilyn Manson
(His cover of it)
So in Ode to him, it's going to be a bit twisted.
In a list
A contest entry
- Unappreciated Brilliance by KayJay.
1300 points, ended June 23, 2008, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Thoughts?
Comments
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Your opening stanza really pulled me in. I love it! and you ended it so wonderfully! I love the imagery. You're a very great writter yourself(:
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Thank you, <3
I Appreciate the time and your comment. This was written awhile back, but other than Manson I have My Ex Gf to thank. Lulz. She was the inspiration for that hell.
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I like this, wicked dark imagery. A good write.
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Why,
Thank you.
I hope you participate in the contest. <3
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^.^ such wonderfully dark word choice! XD
makes me think of when people's parents won't let then be with someone because they think that they're bad for their kid.... i might be the only one seeing the relation, but yeah XD although it also rather reminds me of a spoiled princess and her servant, although loving her despising him.... in a sense? feel free to correct or critisize if i'm wrong XDDD
a grand write
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Thaaank you
Hahaha. I never thought of it that way but you're right. Though, you know poetry effects everyone differently. We can both look at the same masterpiece and both find completely different emotions from it. You know? I'm glad that you like it!!
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Wow, Loving the darkness here!!!
Deep, dark & incredibly visual...
Way to channel that darkness, you weild it well...
Had me captivated throughout with great use of metaphor, wordplay/use/choice.
Another fantastic write...
Well done!!!
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Thank you. I suppose i'm just lucky. I have the best inspirations.
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Very raw and dark emotions here, love the imagery and the way you can almost feel a rush of sadness and anger run through you.
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I liked this. Very nice write and I'm going to pray that you also know the origional "Tainted Love". I like the darkness of this peice. Thanks for the entry!
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^.^
thank you. i'm glad you enjoyed it.
&& Oh but ofcourse i do!
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Twisted, dark, and beautifully phrased... I will be the first to admit, this is NOT my genre... but I can appreciate the persona that you put on to write this. I think that's the true beauty of good poetry... you don't really write it... you assume the identity of someone who could write it... and you've done that very well...
I think this is a a really solid piece...Thank you for sharing...Truely, this is what I was hoping for... and it's unappreciated no longer.
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I like this alot. I love Manson so thats a plus lmao.. Very well written i liked it alot. Thanks for entering my contest i wish you the best of luck.
for you
xxx..<3..
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I'm really glad you liked it so much. Manson is amazing. -high fives-
you're very welcome and Thank you for the opportunity.
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Last line= perfect.
Well really, last stanza = perfect.
A brilliant take on the song I must say, then again I like your work alot whether or not it is influenced by Manson. Kudos.
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Hehehe. THANK YOU
=D You're so sweet. Yess.
Now, Message me, bishe.
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Very Nice...I think a bit longer would do it even more justice, but, the poem/song itself is very good...full of twisted desires and darkness.
Bravo love! lol
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Hehehe. Thank you missy. =]
I will definitly think about making it longer. ^.^
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yay! Manson! You did do this song justice. I loved the 'twisted' ways you put in it. My favorite lines are, "I love when you stab me in the back/ I adore my infected wounds" Amazing. I loved this piece. I wish you luck in this contest too! Keep this up. Its a brilliant piece.
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Blood Princess
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I'm honored you feel that way. =]
I hoped, i had done some good.
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i love "i swoon for our disaster" the whole love hate thing is brillient here ^.^
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Aw. Thank you. =]
I'm very glad you liked it. ^.^
I LOVE that song.
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