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Shadows

These unexplainable shadows
of which heart's religion fails,
to provide but clichéd answers,
to keep hope until death's grave;
prey upon soul as slow cancers,
which seek to degrade and enslave,
with the piercings of harsh nails,
and castings darker than shadows.

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  • loving.a.soldier
    June 11, 2008

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    Great job! I find this piece to be utterly fantastic! Keep it up! Good luck to you and thanks for entering

    The One and Only...

    ~Lynn Jones


  • Tattboyspet
    June 11, 2008
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    It is NEVER in vain my friend!
    See? You've learnt that religion sucks ... lol!
    nicely done here! SO enjoyed this one ... (is it just me or is your writing getting MUCH easier to decipher?!)


    • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
      June 11, 2008
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      heart's religion is just a fancy phrase for Love

      • Tattboyspet
        June 11, 2008
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        nope - if I read it the way I did the first time around it makes me feel better inside, but if I read it as though it's love it's a REALLY sad thing to read, so I prefer MY take on it


    • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
      June 11, 2008
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      Hehe "Heart's religion" and regular religion are two different things.

      I donno.

      • Tattboyspet
        June 11, 2008
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        dunno really - faith is an exceptionally strong emotion lol!
        I read that the religious zealots are holding onto dreams of a pure soul by living their lives the wrong way
        what did you mean in this one then huh huh huh?????


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    June 10, 2008

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    Oh man.. I can relate to this so deeply!!! I can barely explain.... I've once again read my own meaning into this lol.. and it struck me hard!! I think this could have multiple meanings... it's powerful and stark!

    Amazing write!


  • Ithica silver member
    June 10, 2008

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    Wow! You do the dark genre really well... this is as deep as it is dark, but full of emotion instead of evil... Nicely done!!!


  • perfectsunset gold member
    June 10, 2008

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    Wow, this was so full of emotion and a powerful message from within pours out beautifully and gracefully. Loved this line "prey upon soul as slow cancers" -- so original and such a good metaphor.

    Best of luck in the contest


  • luna-midnight gold member
    June 10, 2008

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    awww wow, this is great mark, veyr intense, good luck in the contest and take care
    stephanie

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